Question

Cell phone 作文第三段（3）

老师，这是第三段 I think the cell phone is so good that makes our life more confortable and convenient . I believe that a bright future is a waiting us if we make a good use of cell phone. 完结篇，请老师批改，谢谢老师

Answer 1

修改：
I
think
the
cell
phone
is
so
good
that
it
makes
our
life
more
comfortable
and
convenient.
I
believe
there
is
a
bright
future
waiting
for
it
if
we
make
good
use
of
it.
解释：
1.
so...that...中的that...是一个结果状语从句，而从句是不能没有主语的；
2.
感觉是“手机有一个光明的未来”，而不是“我们有一个光明的未来”；
3.
固定短语：wait
for
sb/sth，for不能省略；
4.
make
good
use
of...中不能加入a；
5.
最后一段稍显单薄，应该再稍加丰富。