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Hi Stephanie,

I have received my CAS. I am applying my visa, but it needs about 20 days.
I have a problem to ask you. Can I give you the upfront payment after I get my visa?
Because my parents need some money recently, we will gei you the payment before I arrive in UK.I think my task is applying visa now.

I will E-mail you when I get my visa.

Regards,

JiaQi

看看没有什么语法错误之类的东西么

Answer 1

I am applying my visa.
-> I am applying for my visa.(申请要说apply for)

Can I give you the upfront payment after I get my visa?
-> Can I give you the upfront payment after I having got my visa?
(最好从句用完成时，表明两个动作的前后顺序，先拿到护照，我再交钱给你）

we will gei you the payment before I arrive in UK
-> gei改成give，可能中文说习惯了没改过来

I think my task is applying visa now.
-> I think my most important taks for now is applying for the visa.
（这样更符合习惯一些吧，现在最重要的任务，还有申请是apply for）

其他都可以理解没问题的

Answer 2

改写还是重写更省力

The CAS was received and I'm applying for the visa which will take me about 20 days.
Would you please do me a favour to allow me remitting the front money to you after I get the visa?
Because my parents need money urgently theses days and we will sure give you the money before I arrive in UK. The first thing first for me is to apply for the visa at present, please understand that.

I will inform you by E-mail as soon as I get the visa.

Best regards
JiaQi

front money 预付金，定金
first thing first 最要紧的事情
Would you please do me a favour 能帮我一个忙吗？

Answer 3

apply用作申请时要加for 才能构成
upfront adj.预付的,在前面的,直率的<br />adv 在前面,在最前面
如果想表达预付款的话最好用advance payment，当然这个也没错
we will gei you the payment before I arrive in UK中的gei打错了吧？
整体没有什么语法错误

Answer 4

1.apply for sth.