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topic:It is important forchildren to learn the difference between right and wrong at anearly age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn thisdistinction.
To what extent do you agreeor disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishmentshould parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach goodbehaviour to children?

essay:people attach much importance to education,including academic study and social behavior.parents and teachers spare no efforts in helping children with differentiate right and wrong at an early age.some people think that punishment is of much necessity at this point.i partly agree with this point.

punishing in a proper way can play a significant role.children are too young to make distinction by themselves.occasionally,it is impossible for them to recognize their mistake without being punished ,because they can hardly realize the severity of mistakes they made.by the use of reasonable penalization,they are like to have a better understanding towards the distinction.

however,kids might engender a feeling of fear on account of too much penalization.therefor,they are not able to make differences but listen to their parents.apart from this,it is likely for children to be antipathy to the way of punishment so that they make wrong decisions by purpose,and is must be the last thing parents want to see.

in my personal view,a type of self-examination can be a advisable way to punish children. firstly, they will not be hurt in terms of the solution.besides,children are given some time to recall the causes why they are punished and what they need to do to make changes.last but not least,they can be totally open to their parents or teachers in this moderate and gentle way.to sum up,children need to be instilled with the concepts slowly,as well as give some appropriate instructions to ensure the best outcome.

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