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My bedroom
Look!This is my bedroom. My bedroom isn't very big, but is very tidy. There is a window in the wall. There is a bed near the window. The bed is black and white. I often sleep in it everynight. There is a board behind a blue desk. And there is a light in my bedroom. The light is brighter. Although my bedroom is not very beautiful, but I also like it very much.

Do you like my bedroom? What about yours?

Answer 1

My bedroom

Look!This is my bedroom. My bedroom isn't very big, but（ it ）is very tidy. There is a window （on) the wall. There is a bed near the window. The bed is black and white. I （often删掉不要） sleep (on) it everynight. There is a board behind a blue desk. And there is a light in my bedroom. The light is (bright). Although my bedroom is not very beautiful, （but不要） I (also删掉不要）like it very much.
Do you like my bedroom? What about yours?

评价：错误不多，介词需要再注意一些。比较级使用要谨慎。

翻译：我的房间
看啊！这是我的房间。我的房间不大，但它十分整洁。墙上有一扇窗，床边有床。床是黑白色的。我每晚都在上面睡。在蓝色的桌子后面有一个板。我房里还有一盏灯，灯很亮。虽然我的房间不是很漂亮，但我很喜欢它。
你（们）喜欢我的房间吗？你（们）的呢？

Answer 2

题问补充:我的卧室 看!这是我的卧室。我 的卧室不是很大,但很整洁。有一个窗口在 墙上。有一个床靠近窗户。床是黑色和白 色。我经常睡在这众生。有一个蓝色的桌 子后面一个董事会。和有一个灯在我的卧 室里。灯是亮的。虽然我的卧室不是很漂 亮,但是我也很喜欢它。 你喜欢我的卧室吗 ?你的呢?