Question

英语文章写得不错的，帮我修改下面三句话

1. Research has shown that it's unhealthy to be exposed to second-hand smoking. Even though you do not smoke, the smokers around you exhale harmful substances into the air, and the invisible substances diffuse and spread until you breathe them into your own lung, as the result of which your health is affected. Day after day, such toxic substances accumulate to a certain level to destroy your immune system and your health begins to collapse.

2. If you were given a million dollars and only one day to spend it, what would you do？It is not an easy question; people usually do not think much about what rarely happens. One million dollars is not a small amount of money, so we had better spend it over a period of time so that you may make better decision.

3. More than 2000 people died when Haiti was struck by an earthquake. Countries and governments around the world provided help as well as care instantly, and global citizens worried about victims and their families. Individual volunteers went to Haiti as soon as possible as to offer the best help they could, and international companies donated good amount of money to help rebuild homes for local people.
帮我改改语法错误，还有文章的连贯性

Answer 1

正如你说的，文章写得的确很不错，很多句子跟本不用更改，只是理论上有些或需要稍为更正一下即可。

 

1. Research has shown that it's unhealthy to be exposed to second-hand smoking. Even though you do not smoke, the smokers around you exhale harmful substances into the air, and the invisible substances diffuse and spread until you breathe them into your own lung, as the result of which your health is affected. Day after day, such toxic substances accumulate to a certain level to destroy your immune system and your health begins to collapse (改用deteriorate会更好).

    

2. If you were given a million dollars and only one day to spend it, what would you do？It is not an easy question; people usually do not think much about what rarely happens. One million dollars is not a small amount of money, so we had better spend it over a period of time so that you may make better decision.对这个问题的答案不正确，而且跟本没有正式回答。因为条件是要你一天之内"化掉" (spent it)，即不可以给家人或亲人的，但可不可以损赠呢?
   我认为应改写为: It isn't an easy question to answer, also it would have more than a million answers, with such a vast sum of money and so little time to spend it. Since you can't buy a house or eat one million dollars of food in just one day. So if I am allowed, I will buy some shares or even better I will donate the money to the poor.

 

3. More than 2000 people died when Haiti was struck by an earthquake. Countries and governments around the world provided help as well as care instantly, and (global citizens worried 改为 many (或 a lot of) people from all over the wrold were showing great concern) about (应加上the) victims and their families. Individual volunteers went to Haiti as soon as possible as to offer the best help they could, and international companies donated good amount of money to help rebuild(ing) homes for (the) local people.

Answer 2

是修改还是翻译，看到有人翻译了。。这三段话是中国人写的吧？中式思维略明显了些。。。并且好多run-on的句子，用一个and 就吧两个句子连起来了。。。

Answer 3

1。研究表明，暴露于二手烟是不健康的。即使你不吸烟，吸烟者在你呼气时有害物质进入空气，和看不见的物质扩散和蔓延，直到你呼吸到你自己的肺，由于你的健康影响。一天又一天，这些有毒物质积累到一定程度破坏你的免疫系统和你的健康开始崩溃。2。如果你有一百万美元，一天只花，你会做什么？这不是一个容易的问题；人们通常不考虑很少发生什么。一百万美元不是一个小数额的钱，所以我们最好把它在一段时间内，你可以做出更好的决策。3。超过2000人死于海地的地震。世界各地的国家和政府提供的帮助和关怀的瞬间，与全球公民担心受害者和他们的家属。志愿者去海地尽快提供尽可能的帮助，和国际公司捐赠了很多钱来帮助重建当地人的家园。

Answer 4

是尽量用高级句式吗？