Question

帮忙修改一篇英语作文

Part one The school yard
It is an old school with a long history. My first impression of it is that it’s very beautiful and modern. The buildings are in European style. And they are in red and white. There is a big library named Yifutang in school. The student can also do homework there.
Our classroom is amazing and clean. Every classroom has a computer with a big screen, almost as big as a blackboard. The classroom is very bright because there are many windows and lights.
There is a big dining room in the school. The food is very delicious and hundreds of students have their meals there every day. And there is a nice fountain in front of the dining room. A wonderful playground is behind the Qinmianlou. Many trees are planted around the playground. We can play basketball, table tennis, football and badminton after school there.
高一新生要求写一篇关于新学校的文章
大家帮忙将不合适的地方和有错误的地方修改一下，谢谢啦！
全文见问题和一楼

Answer 1

Corrections are made, though some might have been missed out. Question marks indicating that what you were trying to communicate is not very clear so couldn't really do any changes on those.

Part one The school yard
It is an old school with a long history. My first impression of it is that it’s very beautiful and modern. The buildings are in European style. And they are red and white. There is a big library named Yifutang in school. The students can also do their homework there.
Our classroom is amazing and clean. Every classroom has a big screen computer, almost as big as a blackboard. The classroom is very bright because there are many windows and lights.
There is a big dining room in the school. The food is very delicious and hundreds of students have their meals there everyday. And there is a nice fountain in front of the dining room. A wonderful playground is behind the Qinmianlou. Many trees are planted around the playground. We can play basketball, table tennis, football and badminton there after school .

Part two Our teachers
In senior high, we would meet some new classmates, as well as some new teachers. They are all enthusiastic. Let me introduce some of them to you!
Our English teacher, Ms Gu, is really capable (experienced?). She can speak English very well. We all admire her very much and want to speak English as well as her. She is full of energy, which doesn’t depend on the age. She explains things clearly and her teaching is well organized. In her class, we speak a lot and never get bored! She will be quite strict if we forget to do the homework. But when we make progress, she is happy and praises us at once. I believe we will improve our English with her help.
We have two head teachers. One is our biology teacher, Mr. Li. And the other is our physics teacher, Mr. Yi. Mr. Li is an experienced teacher. He always gives us some useful suggestions about studying. Mr. Yi often tells us some interesting things about physics. They are both kind and patient. We like them very much.
Our Chinese teacher wears a pair of glasses and he is a little heavy (?). He is kind and always smiles. He knows a lot about Chinese literature. Our math teacher, Mr. Lei, is also knowledgeable. We all admire them.

Part three The famous students
There are always some famous students appearing in my school. In old times, there were many students, who once attended my school, who made many contributions to society. Such as Gao Junyu, the first Communist Party member in Shanxi province; Peng Zhen, a great statesman; Dong Shouping, a famous artist; Ren Zhigong, a famous physicist and so on. Now, there are also some famous students currently studying at school. Our school basketball team and our school orchestra are famous too.

Part four Our feeling
I think my school is a fantastic place to growup in. I’m deeply impressed by some special features of my school, such as its central location, enthusiastic teachers, famous students and so on.
My school is not far from the city center. Thanks to that, it's very comfortable and convenient to live there.
I was a little shy at the start of being taught. But all the teachers made me agree that there was nothing to be embarrassed about. I’m sure I’ll study better with the help of my teachers.
We can also take part in many after school activities, like MUN. I think these activities made study more fun.
I think we live a healthy and fun life.

Our school is “the beginning of the dreams”. We are going to sprinkle our sweat there in the following three years (?). And we believe that we will reach the culmination three years later. We love our school.

Answer 2

Part one
1、The buildings are in European style,and they are in red and white.

2、There is a big library named Yifutang where students can also do their homework.

3、Besides,our classroom is amazing and clean. 注意句子之间的连接！

4、dining room改成canteen

5、前面有介绍过Qinmianlou吗？出现比较突然

Answer 3

个人建议:

1.多用各种从句和link words(crucial),这样你才能outstanding

2.多背一些比较实用的vocabulary

3.多看英文newspaper or novels.

Our classroom is amazing and clean(我不知道你用amazing在这里是什么意思)

dining room (食堂?????)应该是dining hall吧
part one
it is an old school which is time-honored. i am intensely attracted by the beauiful and modern school,when i come into the school yard, i feel so comfortable. furthermore, i also enjoy the type of architecture in school, which is a kind of European style. Moreover, there is a big library named Yifutang in school, where the student can do their homework and find some information about their subjects.

in front of the school yard, you can see our classroom building(这个我不确定用的对不对),which is marvelous and fantastic. every classroon has many advanced electronic aid, such as computer,projecting camera.during free time, we go to playground,and take part in some sports, like basketball, table tennis, foodball and badminton.so i really enjoy the school time.

我只是粗略的改了一下,还有写作文的时候我想没有必要面面俱到........
有些单词也许用的不是很合适，列如：marvelous, fantastic 你可以换，因为我想你是高一第一篇作文要给老师留下好印象，所以用这些词．．．．．

Answer 4

很好了饿