Question

谁帮我看一下，我儿子写的这篇英语短文，用词合理吗，句子通顺吗？

Im going to have a busy weekend!on saturday.Im going to the wang tan by bus.Im going to by a new pen.new note book.new math magazine and some story_books.Then Im going to go home and read the new books and doing homework.on sunday,Im going to the supermarket with my dassmate.we"re going aften lunch.then in the eveing.Im going to read the book.and sleep.that will be fun! what about you?what are you going to do on the weekend?

Answer 1

1.Im应为I'am,它是I和am的缩写
2.Im going to by a new pen中的by应为buy，buy意为“买”
3.new note book.new math magazine 应为a new note book.a new math magazine 。不定冠词a不可省
4.and read the new books 应去掉and，当出现多个并列词组时，前几个之间用逗号连接，最后两个之间要用and
5.we"re going aften lunch应为we're going to there aften lunch.go后面的宾语不可省，否则句子不完整
6.and sleep最好改为then sleep。因为and表示并列，而then是“然后”，有一个先后关系，逻辑上也的确是先看书然后睡觉，而不是“看书并且睡觉”
7.on the weekend?应为On weekends，意为“在周末”

祝您顺利！

Answer 2

纯粹时篇英文式的流水帐，修改如下：
this weekend ,i will be keeping busy.on Saturday,i am gonna wang tan by bus to buy some things,for example, pen,notebook,magazines and story books.then i will return home ,read new books and do my homework.net day,my plan of shopping in the supermarket with classmates after lunch will go on.as well,read and sleep as usual that night.i can't imagine what a funny day it will be!
what about you?what will you do at the weekend?
将来时除了be going to 之外，还可以用很多种写法，例如，be to do ,be about to do.will do ，整段文章重复使用一种句式，未免太单调。还有语句的时态，句式的花样，词组的使用，都应该注意一下。gonna是美式英语的写法，可以用going to 转换。

Answer 3

I will have a busy weekend!On saturday,I am going to WangTan by bus.I want to buy a pen,a note book,a math magazine and some story books.Then I will go home read the new books and doing homework.On sunday,I'll go to the supermarket with my classmate after lunch.Then in the eveing,I'll read the books and then go to sleep.That will be fine! what about you?what are you going to do on this weekend?
修改后是不是通顺多了，语法准确，还帮你改了错别字及应注意的首字母大小写和啰嗦句子合并,希望能够帮助你--- 一个英语爱好者

Answer 4

I am going to have a busy weekend!On Saturday.I am going to the Wangtan by bus.I am going to buy some new things.Example a pen,a notebook,a math magazine and some storybooks.Then I will to go home and read the new books and do homework.On Sunday,Im going to the supermarket with my dassmate.we will go there after lunch.Then in the eveing.I am going to read the book and go to sleep.I think this weekend will be very busy .what about you?What are you going to do on the weekend?