Question

英语演讲稿！！！帮我检查下有没有语法错误，并纠正，谢谢

hi,everybody.Today,i will simply introduce one of my favourite companies--blizzard.
Refer to blizzard, we can think of STAR CRAFT,DIOBLO,WARCRAFT , WORLD OF WARCRAFT and so on so many classic games.Also it is NO.1 in industry of PC games.
BLIZZARD is a America games company and be founded in 1994.During 1994 to 1996,blizzard was just a common company, but in 1996,it published a new game,--starcraft,which changed blizzard’s image.The company was famous for this game,and soon,the game was popular with gamers all over the world.
In 2004,Blizzard got to a new fied—online games.Yes,it’s WOW.WOW has most gamers and affected many teenagers and adults.So power!
If you know Blizzard,that’ok .If you don’t know this company,never mind ,play the games,and you will love it.
This is Blizzard,gamers’s Blizzard.
hi,everybody.Today,i will simply introduce one of my favourite companies--blizzard.
Refer to blizzard, we can think of STAR CRAFT,DIOBLO,WARCRAFT , WORLD OF WARCRAFT so many classic games.Also it is NO.1 in the industry of PC games.
BLIZZARD is an America games company and was founded in 1994.During 1994 to 1996,blizzard was just a common company, but in 1996,it produced a new game,--starcraft,which changed blizzard’s image.The company was famous for this game,and soon,the game was popular with gamers all over the world.
In 2004,Blizzard got to a new fied—online games.Yes,it’s WOW.WOW has the most gamers and affected many teenagers and adults.So powerful!
If you know Blizzard,that’ok .If you don’t know this company,never mind ,play the games,and you will love it.
This is Blizzard,gamers’ Blizzard.
这是改过之后的，大家再看看，谢谢！

Answer 1

1.感觉演讲稿需要正式，所以认为开始的hi可以改为Hello!
2.and so on so many classic games这里有问题，and so on后面是不能再跟名词了。
3.in the industry of
4.BLIZZARD is an American
5.and was founded in 1994
6.it produced a new game(publish一般指书出版，produce可以指生产了一个软件）
7.WOW has the most gamers
8.So powerful!
9.gamers’ Blizzard(没有s了）

因为你说的是Blizzard..所以我帮你了。。。哈哈
我也超级支持玻璃碴的。。。
SC2赶紧出吧

Answer 2

hi,everybody.Today,i will simply introduce one of my favourite companies--blizzard.
Referring to blizzard, we can think of STAR CRAFT,DIOBLO,WARCRAFT , WORLD OF WARCRAFT and so many classic games.Also it is the NO.1 in industry of PC games.
BLIZZARD is an American games company and is founded in 1994.During 1994 to 1996,blizzard was just a common company, but in 1996,it published a new game--starcraft,which changed blizzard’s imagination.The company was famous for this game,and soon,the game was popular among gamers all over the world.
In 2004,Blizzard got to a new field—online games.Yes,it’s WOW.WOW has the most gamers and affected many teenagers and adults.So power!
If you know Blizzard,that’ok .If you don’t know this company,never mind ,play the games,and you will love it.
This is Blizzard,gamers’s Blizzard.

改正后的，错误不是很多