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修改中英文翻译（计算机方面 汉译英）谢谢！

是一篇论文的摘要，能帮我看看英文部分还有什么地方需要修改吗？非常感谢！！

基于ASP的信息管理系统——网上书店
摘 要
论文主要介绍了此次毕业设计的题目——“网上书店”的开发背景及对其进行分析、设计和实现的过程。随着计算机网络、通信技术的日益发展，以及Internet的普及和应用，数据库技术在Internet中的应用越来越广泛，为广大网络用户提供了更加周到且人性化的服务，人性化已逐渐成为当今Web应用的潮流。虽然网上书店在我国起步不久，但是发展迅猛。随着我国互联网的日益普及和网上书店的愈加成熟，其市场潜力必定会得到充分的发挥。
网上书店系统可以实现人们远程逛书店和购买图书的愿望。本系统主要功能是帮助经营实物书店的人们扩大市场、增加知名度。基本功能包括用户注册会员、登录、图书展示、图书查询、在线浏览图书、远程购买、远程交易等。此系统是基于出版社等用户背景开发的，应用的开发工具是Asp及Access 2000数据库，可以有效实现网上图书的浏览、交易等操作。
在论文中，介绍了电子商务及网上书店的相关知识，并根据以上知识制作成网站。主要内容包括：调研分析、可行性研究、平台论证、需求分析、网站的总体设计、详细设计、数据库设计，以及一些网站制作的主要程序代码等，并在文中通过流程图和文字加以解释说明。

Information Management System Based on ASP——Online Bookstore
Abstract
The thesis mainly introduces the developing background and how to analyze, design and realize the graduation project--“online bookstore”. With the development of The computer network, the communication flourish more and more daily as well as the Internet popularization and the application, the database technology is more and more widespread applied in the Internet, provided more and more circumspect and individual service for network users. Individuality has gradually become the update fashion of the Web applications. The online bookstore just started in our country, but is more popular along with our country Internet and the online bookstore hastens maturely, the market potential can obtain the full display.
Online bookstore can make people stroll in bookstore and select book needed from long distance. And the main function of the system is to help bookseller expand the scale of bookstore and enhance their force. The basic functions of the system include member registration, logging on, book demonstration, book inquiry, browsing online, long-distance purchase, long-distance transaction, and so on. The system, which used ASP and Access 2000 as developing tools, is based on user background of publishing company, and it can realize effective transactions online.
The thesis introduces the related knowledge about on electronic commerce and bookstore online, and set up the website based on above knowledge. The main content of the demonstration, requirement analysis, website design, detailed design, database design, and so on, and these are all explained through the flow chart and by letters.
虽然没有用上，不过还是谢谢两位了。
不知道选哪个好，就投票吧，不然分也浪费了，呵呵~

Answer 1

This paper mainly introduces the graduation design topic of online bookstore "-" the development background and carries on the analysis, design and implementation process. Along with the computer network and communication technology development, and the application and popularization of the Internet in the database technology, the Internet is widely used for the network users provides circumspect and humanized service, humanity has gradually become the tidal current Web applications. Although the online bookstore in China, but soon developed rapidly. With the increasing popularity of the Internet and the increasingly mature online bookstore, its potential market will surely get sufficient play.
Online bookstore system can realize people to buy books and remote stroll bookstore. This system is the main function is to help the people to expand business real bookstore, increase the market. The basic function of registered members, including the user login, books, books, and inquires browsing online purchase, remote transactions, distance etc. This system is based on the background of the development and other users to press, application development tools is Asp and Access database, can effectively 2000 book online transactions, browse, operation.
In the paper, introduces the electronic commerce and the related knowledge of online bookstore, and according to the above knowledge into web site. Main contents include: analysis, feasibility study, platform, requirement analysis, the overall design, web design, database design, detail and some of the main production site code, and in the flow chart and through them explanation.

Answer 2

According to ASP the system-net of the information management top bookstore
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The thesis was main introduction this time graduation design of topic-"on-line bookstore" of development background and as to it's carry on analysis, design and realization of process.Along with calculator network, correspondence technique of day by day development, and Internet of universality and application, the database technique is in the Internet of application more and more extensive, provided for the large network customer more thoughtful and humanization of service, humanization already gradual become Web nowadays application of current.Although the on-line bookstore is in the our country start soon, the development be fast fierce.Along with our country Internet day by day universality and on-line bookstore of add more mature, its market potential necessarily will get full of exertive.
On-line bookstore system can the realization people's long range stroll bookstore and purchase the wishes of book.The this system main function is people of the real object bookstore of the help management extension market, increment popularity.The basic function include a customer to register a member, register, book demonstration, book search, on-line browse a book, long range to purchase, long range trade etc..This system is according to publisher etc. customer background development, application of development tool's being an Asp and Access be 2000 databases and can be valid realization browse of on-line book, trade etc. operation.
In the thesis, introduction electronic commerce and net top bookstore of related knowledge, and basis above knowledge creation become website.The main contents include:Investigation analysis, possibility research, terrace argument, need analysis, website of total design, detailed design, database design, and some website creation of main procedure code etc., and take into explanation elucidation through flow chart and writing in the text.