Question

自己翻译的Mariah Carey—Hero的歌词，请帮我看看~

there's a hero
if you look inside your heart 如果你能看到你内心的深处 那有一个英雄
you don't have to be afraid
of what you are
there's an answer 你不必害怕 你自己是谁 这没有必然的答案
if you reach into your soul
and the sorrow that you know
will melt away 如果你看进你灵魂的深处 那么你的忧伤就会消融
and then a hero comes along 一个英雄走过来
with the strength to carry on 带着继续前行的力量
and you cast your fears aside 你会把你的恐惧抛到一边
and you know you can survive 你知道你会活下去的
so when you feel like hope is gone 所以当你感到无望的时候
look inside you and be strong 看清你自己 坚强起来
and you'll finally see the truth
that a hero lies in you 最后你会发现一个真理 其实英雄就在你身上
it's a long road 这是一条漫长的路
when you face the world alone 当你独自面对世界的时候
no one reaches out a hand
for you to hold 没有人会伸出手 让你握住
you can find love
if you search within yourself 如果你看清你自己 你会发现爱
and the emptiness you felt will disappear 你的空虚会消失
and then a hero comes along 一个英雄走过来
with the strength to carry on 带着继续前行的力量
and you cast your fears aside 你会把你的恐惧抛到一边
[02;14]and you know you can survive 你知道你会活下去的
so when you feel like hope is gone 所以当你感到无望的时候
look inside you and be strong 看清你自己 坚强起来
and you'll finally see the truth
that a hero lies in you 最后你会发现一个真理 其实英雄就在你身上
lord knows...... 上帝知道
dreams are hard to follow 梦想是难以追寻的
but don't let anyone
tear them away 但不要让任何人 把它们撕毁
hold on
there will be tomorrow 坚持住 会有明天
in time you'll find the away 你会找到属于你的路
and then a hero comes along 一个英雄走过来
with the strength to carry on 带着继续前行的力量
and you cast your fears aside 你会把你的恐惧抛到一边
and you know you can survive 你知道你会活下去的
so when you feel like hope is gone 所以当你感到无望的时候
look inside you and be strong 看清你自己 坚强起来
and you'll finally see the truth 最终你会发现一个真理
that a hero lies in you其实英雄就在你身上

觉得翻译的有些死板，有的句子就是找不到更贴切的说法~还望大家赐教，谢谢了~

Answer 1

个人认为你翻译的还是不错的，不过有些东西要注意，比如
and you'll finally see the truth 最终你会发现一个真理
我要是你我就不翻译成“一个真理”，直接“最后你会发现真理”
要简短有力，不要拖泥带水...
加油吧

Answer 2

这种有名的歌网上有现成的歌词，何不去查一查自己对照一下。

Answer 3

明明是英文歌为什么要翻成中文呢？
有的东西硬翻成中文就没味道了

Answer 4

不会不会...翻译得很不错拉~