Question

哪位高手能帮我看一下这份英文翻译?

请懂的朋友帮我看一下,是否存在语法错误或是什么的.如果有错,麻烦帮我修改一下好吗?谢谢!!!

原文:
我的名字叫×××，今年16岁。我出生在一个每天都充满着温馨和谐气氛的家庭里。从小爸爸就教导我怎样去做人，培养我做一个遇事坚强，做事有毅力，对事情充满责任感的人。而妈妈则给予了我无边的慈爱，潜移默化的培养了我对事细腻，对人友爱的性格特点。我喜欢运动以及音乐。每天，我都会抽出一些时间去打打球或是练习乐器，因为这样不仅能使我身体健康，也能陶冶情操。
在校园生活中，我认真学习，遇到难题时善于请教他人，老师和同学们也都很乐意帮助我，学习成绩还不错。在校外，我喜欢交友和聊天，在这些过程中学习一些知识并锻炼我的口才。
我目前的目标是努力学好英语和文化知识，因为我深知英语在当今社会的重要性，它是连接世界的纽带，在学习、交流和工作上都起到了很大的帮助。在本国，环境限制了英语的学习，教育水平也不能与国际齐平，使我的英语水平得不到较大的提高。因此，我想寻找一个更好的环境中去学习英语。于是，一位曾到美国学习的朋友向我推荐了她所毕业的学校，了解到只是一所口碑很好的学校。我想，在那里我可以更好地学习文化知识，使自己的文化层次得到更大的提升，并且通过我所学到的知识来了解美国文化。

译文:
My name is XXX, 16 years old this year. I was born in a full of warmth every family in harmony. Father taught me how to childhood, to cultivate a strong, I do have something to do with perseverance, sense of responsibility person. But mom, I was given the boundless mercy, exerts a subtle influence on things I trained for friendship, character. I like sports and music. Every day, I will spare some time to play ball or exercise, because such instruments can not only make me healthy body, also can edify sentiment.
In campus life, I study hard, ask others at the problems, the teachers and students are very willing to help me, learning achievement is good. Outside, I like making friends and chat, in the process of learning some knowledge and exercise my eloquence.
I now aims to learn English and cultural knowledge, because I know the importance of English in today's society, it is the connection between the world, in the study, work and communication has played a great help. In the country, environment, education level of learning English can flush with international, make my English level is not improved. Therefore, I want to find a better environment for learning English. Then, one has to study in the United States to my friend recommended her to the school graduation, which is a very good reputation. I think, where I can better learning culture knowledge, make oneself of the cultural level of the greater, and through my knowledge to know about American culture.

Answer 1

My name is XXX, 16 years old . I was born in a family full of warm and harmony. My father taught me how to be a real man ---- a strong and persevering man with sense of responsibility . But mom, have given me endless love, she influence me in the detail. I like sports and music. I spend my spare time to play balls or the instruments because it can make me stronger and happier.
你是拿机器翻译的吧，实在是没办法改了，错误太多，不符合英语的语言和文法。没有精力和耐心再改下去了，你既然都要出国了，就花点钱让别人给你写一篇呗，也不差那点钱了，自我介绍还是口语化的更能和老外沟通不然由于两国文化的差异会造成一些误会，而且如果按照你的作文翻译的话，更很僵硬，让外国人听得很别扭，一点小小的建议。

Answer 2

My name is …. I’m 16 years old. I was born in a family full of warmth and harmony every day. When I was a child, my father taught me how to be a man, and taught me to be strong, perseverant and responsible. My mother gave me boundless love, and she exerted a subtle influence on me which made me be careful with everything and be kind to others. I like sports and music. I will spare some time to play ball or practice some instruments every day because it can make me healthy and happy.
In campus life, I work hard, and when I come across some problems I will ask for help. Teachers and classmates all like to help me, so I have good grades. Outside, I like to chat with my friends from which I learn a lot of knowledge and I practice my oral English.
My present goal is to learn English and cultural knowledge well, because I deeply know the importance of English in modern society. English is the tie of the whole world, and it play an important role in study, communication and work. At home, the surroundings restricts the study of English, and the educational level cannot be balanced with the international level which makes my English not be improved. As a result, I want to find a better environment to learn English. And one of my friends who ever went to America to study recommended her school to me, and I find that it is a well-known school. So I think maybe I can learn knowledge better in that school, and make my cultural level get more improvement and through what I learn I can know more about American culture.

Answer 3

16 years old this year.改为，I'm 16 years old
剩下的没力看了。。。