Question

我的第一篇英语日记，请大家挑错！

Sunday,August 13, 2006 Rainy
It was cool today.I think the summer is leaving and the autumn is coming!It is exciting because the cool feel we will have!
I went to Beijing Tushu Dasha with my mother this morning.We left home at about 10 o’clock.The bus was too crowded.We got there 30 minutes later.It spent us an hour to choose good books.Finally I bought four books.One of them is called ‘Bo Bing Engish Grammar’.I heard that it is so famous that many English learners have to buy it.As soon as I reached home,I rived off the casing and read it.I think it will become my best English datum.

Answer 1

the 2nd line:(1) was→is (2)在"because"后加"of"或将"we will have"放到"the cool feel"的前面，因为"because"后应该接句子，而"because of"后应该接名词。另外，“感觉”一词应用"feeling",而不是"feel"

the 5th line: spent→took
"It takes + sb. + sometime + to do sth."是固定搭配，意思是“花了某人多长时间去做某事”

the last line:datum→material 学习和参考资料最好用"material"或"reference"

另外，天气既可以用"cool"来形容，也可以用"cold"来形容，但它们的意思不同，"cool"是“凉爽”，而"cold"是“寒冷”。

Answer 2

你是一个非常上进的好学生，我虽然不能很好的给你什么建议，但还是想对你说：加油吧！知识是不会将勤奋者拒之门外的。

Answer 3

指天气好象应该用cold吧
it is exciting because the cool feel we will have!这个句子好象有点奇怪．