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请帮我看下这篇短文有没有语法错误或者用词不当，哪些地方可以改成更高级的词或短语

请帮我看下这篇短文有没有语法错误或者用词不当，哪些地方可以改成更高级的词或短语Today I went shopping with my friends.We haven't seen each other for long time,So I felt very happiness.
we saw the film called《使徒行者》.It's a wonderful film.After the film was over,we went to the gaming hall.We had a good time there.
The day goes quickly when we are playing.I felt a bit sad,but I can play wiyh friends,it's enough.
Even if we seperate the two places, but our hearts are connected together, I believe that in the future we will be better and better, let us silently wish happiness to each other.

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Today I went shopping with my friends. We hadn't seen each other for a long time, so I felt very happy.
We saw the film called“Line Walker”together. It was a wonderful film. After the that, we went to the gaming hall. We had a good time there.
Time flies when you're having fun. The rest of the day had past so quickly that I felt a bit sad, although I enjoyed playing with my friends so much, and that was the most important thing.
Even if we are physically separated from each other, our hearts are connected together. I believe that we will reunite again someday in the future. So let us silently wish happiness to each other for now.

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十分感谢

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不用客气。 另外，第二行应该是 After that, 多了一个the，我的失误 。