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A Blessing In Disguise
When I concern about what event I have experienced seems to be going badly turns out well after all,the decision about whether I become a science student or an art student occurs to me.
In Senior 2,we students have to make a decision,to be a science student or an art student?At that time,all my subject scores are stable,so I face a dillema.Finally,I chose to be a science student,for there will be more majors in colleges about science.Though I took an interest to be an art student,I approved of my parents opinion.
Subsequently,as time went by,I became more specialized in science subjects.As is known to us all that Chinese students have really tough life in our high schools,I can seldom spend some time in my English studying.Obviously,I did a really bad work on my Chinese.Meanwhile,the art students concentrated more on Chinese and English studying.Moreover,this means the art students have better ability of English and Chinese than the science students.
This year,as a foreign language school student,I want to take a test to go to Zhong Shan college in Guangdong province.If succeeded,I would be free of the college entrance test.But the challenge was that we need to take Chinese,Math,English tests.Though I was not as well as the art students in English and Chinese,I got an excellent grade in my mathematics test.From this,it helped to pass the test.I succeeded.
I was so lucky that the Chinise and English couldn't distinguish students' ability so much,but the mathematics test was really difficult.Because most of the students who took part in the tests were art students,the "difficult" did not make any sense to me.So,a poor Chinese student finally become a student specializing in language by his mathematics score.
When this occurs to me,I always sign about the life of a person.The gods may know what will happen next,others will never know the result of an event.From the decision of becoming a science student,I made full use with science students' advantages,finally I saw the rainbows in the sky.In our later life,we may have events like this,but we can not rely on lucky.The most significant thing is that if we try our best and make efforts to fulfill our dreams.

Answer 1

你要怎么改？ 我可以帮你，但是不知道你需要改什么啊 给10好少呀 哈哈 你的内容是这样的，但是你需要怎么改？因祸得福
当我担心我有什么经验的事件似乎是因为出师不利结果以及毕竟，决定是否成为一门科学的学生或学生发生的艺术给我。
高级2 ，我们的学生必须做出决定，是一个科学的艺术学生或学生？在那个时候，我所有的主题是稳定的分数，所以我面临dillema.Finally ，我选择是一个科学的学生，为将有更多的专业院校约science.Though我感兴趣的是一个艺术系学生，我赞成我的父母的意见。
后来，随着时间的推移，我变得更加专门的科学subjects.As众所周知，我们大家，中国的学生真的很难生活在我们的高中，我很少能花一些时间在我的英语studying.Obviously ，我没有真正坏在我Chinese.Meanwhile ，艺术学生集中更多的中文和英文studying.Moreover ，
这意味着最先进的学生有更好的能力，英语和汉语比理科学生。
今年，作为外语的学生，我要借此测试去锺刹嗯学院广东province.If成功，我将免费高考test.But面临的挑战是，我们需要采取中文，数学，英语tests.Though我并不以及艺术系学生在英语和汉语，我一个极好年级数学test.From我这一点，
它有助于通过test.I成功。
我是如此幸运， Chinise和英文不能区分学生的能力这么多，但数学测试真的difficult.Because大多数学生谁参加了测试，艺术院校学生，在“困难”没有作出任何意义me.So ，一个贫穷的中国学生最终成为专业的学生的数学语言的评分。
如果发生这种情况对我来说，我总是签署的生命person.The神可能知道明年会发生什么事，别人永远不会知道的结果， event.From的决定成为一个科学的学生，我充分利用科学学生的优势，最后我看到了彩虹在sky.In我们的晚年生活，我们可能会像这样的事件，但我们不能依靠运气。
最重要的一点是，如果我们尽最大努力实现我们的梦想。