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{求助}英语短文改错及润色

文章如下，是我要发给一位已经离开我们学校的美国老师的电邮，想表达的意思就这么多，主要是想恳求他写推荐信给我，希望大家帮我找找语法错误或者润色一下，不要让那个我的英文表达显得那么青涩，谢了~~

Sorry to disturb you.
Although i don't know whether you still use this e- mail address,i try it as a chance to contact with you.
I am a senior three student who has ever taken your exploring study at 10th grade.
Knowing that you have to leave SZ because of some privit reasons ,but i still remember you've said on our class whether you've left SZ someday or not ,you can still write recommendations for the students you've taught.Cause of the your left and the short of the consulors,this year's students who want to study abroad can't can get any authoritical recommendations,and now it's the time for us to apply to colleges, can you spend some of your time to write a recommendition for me?If you don't have enough time to know about me,i can go to HK to see you.I will very appreciate you if you can help me .

Answer 1

Hi XX,

I'm sorry to disturb you.

Although i don't know whether you still use this e-mail address or not,I just try it so as to contact you.

I'm a senior student in SZ,(最好全称写出来），and I took your class of (课程名称）when you were here (last year?最好加个时间).I'm XX(英文名）

Though you have left SZ because of some privit reasons, I still remember once you said in the class that whether you've left SZ someday or not ,you can still write recommendations for the students you've taught. Beause of your leaving and our school lack of consulors(这个单词没有吧？想表达什么？顾问？Consultant),students who want to study abroad this year can't get any authoritical recommendations. This is especially important because now it's the time for us to apply to colleges. Could you please spare some of your leisure time and write me an recommendation? I will very appreciate it if you could help me. If you still can't remember who I am through this mail, I can go to HK to see you.

Looking forward to your early reply!

Best Regards,

XXX

Answer 2

Dear Mr./Ms.:

I hope I did not surprise you with this email.

My name is ___, a senior student who once took your exploring study class in 10th grade. I have heard from others that you are leaving SZ for personal businesses, I wish you all the best. At such times, it is probably inconvenient to ask a letter of recommendation from you since you will be busy attending other matters, but I believe it will be a great advantage to me to obtain a letter from you. I think it will help me in getting into my dream schools. I can tell you more about myself if you do not have enough information about me. I can even go to HK to meet you, in order to discuss this further.

I really appreciate all your help, from the bottom of my heart. Once again, good luck with everything!

Sincerely, ______

有问题可以联络我。

Answer 3

Dear ...: （写日期）
I’m sorry to disturb you.
I don't know whether you are still using this e- mail address or not, but this is a chance for me to contact with you.
Firstly let me introduce myself. I am a senior three student who once took your exploring study at 10th grade. Knowing that you have to leave SZ because of some private reasons ,I remember that you've said on our class that even if you would leave SZ someday,you can still write recommendations for the students you had taught.
Because of the your departure and the shortage of counselors, students who want to study abroad can't can get any authoritical recommendations this year. Now it's the time for us to apply to colleges, can you spend some of your time writing a recommendation letter for me? If you need to be more familiar with me,I can go to HK to see you.I will appreciate you very much if you can help me .
I wish you all the best.

Answer 4

could you waite me for a moment cause i need to take diner.