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请根据下列要点，假如你是Amy，写封信给你的网友介绍你去年暑假的一次旅行经历。要求：字数80， 注意不同

请根据下列要点，假如你是Amy，写封信给你的网友介绍你去年暑假的一次旅行经历。要求：字数80， 注意不同时态的使用 ，必须包含要点内容。要点：1.去年暑假放假两个月，八月份参加了学校去颐和园(the Summer Palace)的校园旅行。邀请了吴老师加入了本次旅行。2. 早上八点在校门口集中，坐公交到达公园花了两小时，因为路上车辆很多。吴老师有幽默感，在车上讲笑话，我们感觉不无聊。3. 颐和园是最美的名胜之一，同学们在公园里划船，同学们互相帮助，玩得很开心。4. 下午四点回校，回家后我把照片传到我的主页上，你自己去看。5. 自由发挥…… A trip to the Summer PalaceDear John, I am writing a letter to you to tell you something about my trip to the Summer Palace last year._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.Love,Amy

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Dear John, I am writing a letter to you to tell you something about my trip to the Summer Palace last year. We had two months’ holiday last summer,.In August,we invited Mr Wu with us to take part in the school trip to the Summer Palace.At 8:00 am,we met at the school gate .Because of many cars on the road, it took us two hours to get there by bus. Mr Wu told jokes in the bus for us. He was so humorous that we didn’t feel bored.The Summer Palace is one of the most beautiful scenic spots.We went boating in the river,we helped each other and enjoyed ourselves very much.At 4:00 pm,we returned school. I uploaded the pictures to my homepage after I came home.You can go ane see them. Love, Amy

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文。本文作者写去年去颐和园游玩的过程，先是写邀请吴老师一起去游玩，然后写从出发去颐和园到返回学校这一段时间的趣事，最后写回到家把相片上传到自己的主页。游玩的过程应该用一般过去时，对于景点的点评用一般现在时。 【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，例如take part in，.because of ,told jokes,scenic spots,each other,enjoyed ourselves等短语，文中还用到了状语从句He was so humorous that we didn’t feel boredt和I uploaded the pictures to my homepage after I came home.文章层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。