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Asmileislikethesuninwinter,itcanwarmeveryone'sheart.Wheniwasalittlechild,ihardlyeverf...
A smile is like the sun in winter, it can warm everyone's heart.
When i was a little child ,i hardly ever failed. However , no one can be successful forever. Once, i lost in a painting competition, i was too sad to brace my heart,and even thought to give up drawing. When i tell the sadness to my mum, she only gave me a smile and said," it is a gift for your failure , i hope that my smile can bring power to you."
Then the power of that smile make me braver. More importantly, it taught me how to face the difficulties. So it is the gift i like best. 展开
When i was a little child ,i hardly ever failed. However , no one can be successful forever. Once, i lost in a painting competition, i was too sad to brace my heart,and even thought to give up drawing. When i tell the sadness to my mum, she only gave me a smile and said," it is a gift for your failure , i hope that my smile can bring power to you."
Then the power of that smile make me braver. More importantly, it taught me how to face the difficulties. So it is the gift i like best. 展开
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A smile is like the sun in winter, it can warm everyone's heart.
When i was a little child ,i hardly ever failed. However , no one can be successful forever. Once, i lost in a painting competition. I was too sad to brace my heart,and even thought to give up drawing. (这句话有语病。brace my heart是什么意思?even thought 做什么成分?改成:I was so sad that I even decided to give up drawing. )When i told my sorrow to my mother, she only gave me a smile and said," Take the failure as a gift, i hope that my smile can bring power to you."
Then the power of that smile made me courageous. More importantly, it taught me how to face the difficulties. So it is the gift i love
most.
有些时态和语法上的错误,已改正
When i was a little child ,i hardly ever failed. However , no one can be successful forever. Once, i lost in a painting competition. I was too sad to brace my heart,and even thought to give up drawing. (这句话有语病。brace my heart是什么意思?even thought 做什么成分?改成:I was so sad that I even decided to give up drawing. )When i told my sorrow to my mother, she only gave me a smile and said," Take the failure as a gift, i hope that my smile can bring power to you."
Then the power of that smile made me courageous. More importantly, it taught me how to face the difficulties. So it is the gift i love
most.
有些时态和语法上的错误,已改正
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