英语比较好的大哥大姐姐帮忙改一下，谢谢！
helloeverybody,todayismoday.theweatheriscold,soisuggestthegirlandteacheryouwearingawa...
hello everybody,today is moday.the weather is cold,so i suggest the girl and teacher you wearing a warmer coat.
long long ago,my grandpapa talk a story to me.he said that long long ago,a lion came to his village,and ate lots of duck,chicken and a little boy .so my grandpapa let me stay at home in night.after that,i realize that the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.so we should stay away from it.because my grandpapa,i hate the lion,because the lion,i hate the zoo.
however,everybody can't predict the future.the thing all changed because of the zoo 105(room 105）.when first time i came to my bed,i saw a big lion is lying in front of my bed.i immediately remember the word that my grandpapa had said.the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.to my suiprise,the lion talk to me and introduce itself that he is XXX in the next day.and in the zoo,i also saw three giraffes XXX XXX XXX,they are so tall but week.three giraffes look so handsome and kind.but when three giraffes made a rule which said that somebody who is below the 1.75 meter can't join making decision,i know that they are more feral than lion XXX.
although he is strong ,although he is powerful,although he is a lion.he has a kind and a friendly heart.it is a lion who often help others.it is a lion who has a powerful responsibility.it is a lion who study hard day to night.what's more.it is a lion who love the food very much but dislike eating meat.
so do you want to feed a cute lion or the handsome giraffes.please call XXXXXXXXXXX ,the zoo manager.perhaps you will ask but who i am ?i will tell you .i am a silly pig,so i writed such a silly article,just for fun.that's all.
感谢帮我看这篇文章的人，是要做演讲之类的，所以用的简单句很多，同学容易听e...但我知道一定有很多中国式英语，，，所以啦，，请帮帮下啦。。。。
请别说什么没有用书面语或用大写，，，还有，内容有点幼稚，但是不能改！ 展开
long long ago,my grandpapa talk a story to me.he said that long long ago,a lion came to his village,and ate lots of duck,chicken and a little boy .so my grandpapa let me stay at home in night.after that,i realize that the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.so we should stay away from it.because my grandpapa,i hate the lion,because the lion,i hate the zoo.
however,everybody can't predict the future.the thing all changed because of the zoo 105(room 105）.when first time i came to my bed,i saw a big lion is lying in front of my bed.i immediately remember the word that my grandpapa had said.the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.to my suiprise,the lion talk to me and introduce itself that he is XXX in the next day.and in the zoo,i also saw three giraffes XXX XXX XXX,they are so tall but week.three giraffes look so handsome and kind.but when three giraffes made a rule which said that somebody who is below the 1.75 meter can't join making decision,i know that they are more feral than lion XXX.
although he is strong ,although he is powerful,although he is a lion.he has a kind and a friendly heart.it is a lion who often help others.it is a lion who has a powerful responsibility.it is a lion who study hard day to night.what's more.it is a lion who love the food very much but dislike eating meat.
so do you want to feed a cute lion or the handsome giraffes.please call XXXXXXXXXXX ,the zoo manager.perhaps you will ask but who i am ?i will tell you .i am a silly pig,so i writed such a silly article,just for fun.that's all.
感谢帮我看这篇文章的人，是要做演讲之类的，所以用的简单句很多，同学容易听e...但我知道一定有很多中国式英语，，，所以啦，，请帮帮下啦。。。。
请别说什么没有用书面语或用大写，，，还有，内容有点幼稚，但是不能改！ 展开
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hello everybody,today is mo(N)day.the weather is cold,so i suggest the girl(s) and teacher(s) you to wear something warm.(Boys you are strong,maybe you can lend your coats to the ladies)
my grandpapa (once told me)a story .he said that long long (time)ago,a lion came to his village,and (it) ate lots of duck,chicken and a little boy .(It was horrible).so my grandpapa (always)let me stay at home (at) night.after that,i realize(d) that the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.so we should stay away from it.because(of the story) my grandpapa (told me),i hate the lion,(so)i(also) hate the zoo.
however,(nobody can) predict the future.the thing(s) all changed because of the zoo 105(room 105）.when first time i came to my bed,i saw a big lion lying in front of my bed.i immediately remember(ed) the word that my grandpapa had said.the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.to my suiprise,the lion talk to me and introduce itself that he is XXX in the next day.at the zoo,i also saw three giraffes XXX XXX XXX,they are so tall but week.three giraffes look so handsome and kind.but when three giraffes made a rule which said that somebody who is below the 1.75 meter can't make decision,i know that they are more feral than lion XXX.
although he is strong ,although he is powerful,although he is a lion.he has a kind and friendly heart.it is a lion who often help others.it is a lion who has a (strong sense of) responsibility.it is a lion who study hard day to night.what's more.it is a lion who love the food very much but dislike eating meat.
so do you want to feed a cute lion or the handsome giraffes? please call XXXXXXXXXXX ,the zoo manager.perhaps you will ask who i am ? i will tell you .i am a silly pig,so i wrote such a silly article,just for fun.that's all.
好像有点童话故事，虽然不太懂前因后果，不过希望你好好发挥啊
对了，还有， grandfather, grandpa, 好像比较少见grandpapa的
my grandpapa (once told me)a story .he said that long long (time)ago,a lion came to his village,and (it) ate lots of duck,chicken and a little boy .(It was horrible).so my grandpapa (always)let me stay at home (at) night.after that,i realize(d) that the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.so we should stay away from it.because(of the story) my grandpapa (told me),i hate the lion,(so)i(also) hate the zoo.
however,(nobody can) predict the future.the thing(s) all changed because of the zoo 105(room 105）.when first time i came to my bed,i saw a big lion lying in front of my bed.i immediately remember(ed) the word that my grandpapa had said.the lion is strong,dangerous and feral.to my suiprise,the lion talk to me and introduce itself that he is XXX in the next day.at the zoo,i also saw three giraffes XXX XXX XXX,they are so tall but week.three giraffes look so handsome and kind.but when three giraffes made a rule which said that somebody who is below the 1.75 meter can't make decision,i know that they are more feral than lion XXX.
although he is strong ,although he is powerful,although he is a lion.he has a kind and friendly heart.it is a lion who often help others.it is a lion who has a (strong sense of) responsibility.it is a lion who study hard day to night.what's more.it is a lion who love the food very much but dislike eating meat.
so do you want to feed a cute lion or the handsome giraffes? please call XXXXXXXXXXX ,the zoo manager.perhaps you will ask who i am ? i will tell you .i am a silly pig,so i wrote such a silly article,just for fun.that's all.
好像有点童话故事，虽然不太懂前因后果，不过希望你好好发挥啊
对了，还有， grandfather, grandpa, 好像比较少见grandpapa的
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