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【急】英语好的朋友请进来帮个忙！

我写了这篇英语作文，其实也不算是作文，只是为口语课做准备，水平虽然不高，但还是没有十足的把握，想请诸位老师和前辈帮忙检查一下，有错误请指出来，包括词汇、短语、语法等等，谢谢了！！
I don’t think the Singles Day is very special, so I don’t understand the people who attach importance to this festival. I have heard of some person would to rent a girl or boyfriend for one day at the Singles Day. I can’t agree about that, maybe I’m a little conservative, but I think that love is very holy, shouldn’t use money to measure it.
Of course, sometimes the money is quite important. As time goes by, the love will change into the familial affection. At that time, in front of the poverty, the love will become weak. Maybe the money is important, but a family must be based on the love, I think.
Perhaps my view is not very correct, but this is just I want to say.

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Answer 1

内容有点前后不合逻辑（第一段用事例引出不同意，并说也许是因为我保守 第二段为什么又谈到了钱呢？难道是为了钱有的人才被租 因为有钱有钱人才租别人？我觉得如果你想引出第二段钱对婚姻重要与否 就应该再举例说现在有的人结婚是为钱或者－－－的 ）－ 不过错误真不少
As far as I can see ,the Single"s Day is just a common day just like others.And I can not understand why so many people attach importance on it .I 'v ever heard that some people prefer to hire a girl or a boy on the Single Day as well.I can't agree with it.maybe I am a bit of conservative to some degree.
Hoever,at least,in my mind,love is holy and we can not measure it with money.Nowadays,Sone people choose to marry someone not for love but for money.Of couse ,We can't deny that money is the fundamental factor to a happy love life.But can we marry someone just for money? No!As time goes by,money can use up,but love can not fade away.Although at that time,love will change ,but it just vary into another style -- family affection.
Mybe my view is not correct,but that is what I want to say.
(作文写到这样 应该没什么问题了，其中光棍节 我真不会说 写成这样我已经用处了考专业的劲－－ )

Answer 2

1.I have heard of some persons who will rent a girl or boyfriend for one day at the Singles' Day.
2,singles's day
3, I can’t agree about that--> I can’t agree with that
4:but I think that love is very holy, shouldn’t use money to measure it.--->but I think that love is very holy and shouldn’t measure it with money.
5 At that time, in front of the poverty, the love will become weak.---> the love will become weak in front of the poverty then.

Answer 3

I don't know!!!

Answer 4

不有错误