Question

帮我修改一下作文，谢谢啦！

Hope
Hope，I hope….
Hope is helpless when the helping hand. I hope ... ...
I hope to have a happy week 8, I want to have a week 8, and then happy ，free to the week 8. at the eighth day of the week, I can listen to music, play computer games , read novels; play games with pets，I can go skating and enjoy the feeling of flying I really hope to have a happy week 8.
I hope to have a pair of invisible wings. If I have a have a pair of invisible wings, I will fly to lost their family's children and give them warm. I really want to have a pair of invisible wings.
I hope I can do a good writer. I like to read novels. Use beautiful words and then organize them. How wonderful it is! I really want to do a good writer.
Hope ，I hope…

Answer 1

1.废话太多了，英文作文不可以这么写的（中国老师改我不敢保证，外国老师绝对不会喜欢）
有何多重复的地方（我指意思相同相近，还有I hope太多，像结巴...），最好去掉~
2.词用得太简单，重复的太多，语言不够丰富和生动，多找点同义词或词组或其它表达方式去表达重复出现的词（如果同学你还小，老师要求不高，学的单词不多的话，也可以不用太勉强...）
3.有语法错误：
（1）第三行 句子成分残缺when从句缺少谓语
（2）逻辑错误“at the eighth day of the week...”一周只有7天，哪来的第八天？（是不你前面表达有问题？！难道你是想说你希望有8天？如果是那样的话，第四行第一句话的意思就错了,你说的是我想有个快乐的第八周）
（3）标点符号错误。太多了，你自己纠正吧~
（4）"lost their family's children..."应该改为："the children who lost their families..."
（5）"I hope I can do a good writer..."应该改为："I hope I can be a good writer..."
我只是大概看了下，应该还有错误，你自己认真再找找吧~

不知道你多大了，如果还小的话，就不要太在意我说的话，可能会显得比较刻薄....小的话这样也不算太差！加油！

Answer 2

i hope