Question

初中英语作文，求老师纠正点评下~， 谢谢~

老师们帮帮忙~， 主要就是 帮忙查看一下作文是否有语法错误。还有就是，作文是20分的满分，求老师毫不吝啬地打下分数，谢谢。

作文主要内容：China Dream & My University Dream

作文：
Recently we have held a class meeting on "China Dream & My University Dream".I believe that many classmates of mine have a great dream ,and me too.As the power of much easier achieving our dream which is greatest,I make my mind to study harder for going to Peking University.At this time,maybe you want to ask me "What is your dream?" Perhaps you will be amazed by my answer,but I have to say that my root dream is to make our country stronger and stronger.Please don't laugh at me,because dreams must be the first and actions later.I'll study harder at school ,read more good books at home,and to make my brain runs more quickly.I'll play basketball in my spare time.In a word,I'll try my best!

Answer 1

I make my mind to study harder for going to Peking University. "下定决心做某事"应该是make up one's mind to do.在原句中加个up.
I'll study harder at school ,read more good books at home,and to make my brain runs more quickly 从语法的角度说，这句有问题。因为and 是并列连词，前后要连接相同的结构。要么把 and 后面的to 去掉。要么把and 及前面的逗号去掉。在"at school" " read more good"中间加and.

追问

So helpful you are ~ ,I'll study harder and harder with your help. Thank you very much!

追答

我大学英语过了六级的。I have already passed CET6(College English Test Band 6) . It's my pleasure to help you with your English

Answer 2

不用have held改用held
meeting about
a great dream===dreams
and me too====and so am i
中间有一句不晓得你想表明什么
root dream如果你是指最大的愿望或者最主要的愿望的话用main dream 比较好
最后突然讲到业余时间打篮球什么的很奇怪。。。其他的。。就还好吧。

追问

Thank you very much！Both you and the other are good men to us who are in trouble.