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麻烦英语高手帮修改一下这篇文章~急用，在线等！

呃，一篇演讲稿，怕有语法错误，望大家帮我改一下~感激不尽！
（如果有较大改动，麻烦发上来。不过文章篇幅要在1分45秒以内）

The Spring Festival is celebrated by Chinese once a year, the exact date varying according to the lunar calendar, but always falling between mid January and mid February. The Spring Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals for Chinese people. The festival originated from the activities of offering sacrifices to gods or ancestors at the end of the year in the Yin and Shang dynasties. Chinese today celebrate the Chinese New Year with family gatherings and dinners. The most important dinner is the traditional Chinese New Year eve dinner where a feast of delicacies are prepared and eaten. Houses are cleaned for the event and red trimmings are placed on doorways and windows. Red packets filled with money are given by elders to unmarried children and adults during the 15 day celebration and are supposed to bring luck. Families will visit their relatives and friends, bringing greetings from place to place; children who tag along get given red packet from each family. Watching the Spring Festival Gala Evening is a relatively new custom. For Chinese people, sitting together watching the show can bring laughter and happiness to the coming year.
The main topic of the celebration, of course, is family reunion and a new beginning of live. The spring festival indicates reunion and the start of something new for the Chinese nation, just as the importance of Christmas to western people.

Answer 1

The Spring Festival is celebrated by the Chinese once a year.<The exact date varys since the lunar calendar is not fully corresponding with the solar calendar, which we usually use in our daily life, but it always falls between mid January and mid February.>
The Spring Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals for Chinese people. <The festival originated in the Yin and Shang dynasties. Chinese today celebrate the Chinese New Year in a entire new way. No longer do they offer any sacrifices to ancestors or gods, but gather the family together.> The most important meal is the traditional Chinese New Year eve dinner, when a feast is offered and shared.
Houses are cleaned for the event and red trimmings are placed on doorways and windows. <Unmarried children and young adults receive red packets filled with money from elders during the 15-day-celebration, which are supposed to bring luck to them.> Families visit their relatives and friends, bringing greetings from place to place；<Watching the Spring Festival Gala is also a new custom. Not only is sitting together watching the show a relaxation, but also a chance for the families to spend time together.>
The spring festival indicates reunion and the start of a new page for the Chinese, just as the importance of Christmas to western people.
用<>标记的是我改动较大的句子，原文有的地方可能写得不够好、句式过于单一、意思重复我也改了，然后给你的文章重新分了段。因为我不知道你的语速有多快，所以建议你试试看在规定时间里能不能完成，不过我觉得是有些长了，建议你在习俗部分可以适当删减。我也参加过不少演讲比赛，顺便给你提些建议：
1.句式要简洁，但不要简单。太长的句子不但在演讲时生硬而且不易理解
2.停顿一定要恰当，这样才能让听的人好理解
3.要突出重点，语气有缓有平。

Answer 2

左边表行号，右边表示要做修改的内容
2 varying->varys
6 activities->activity
11 where -> when
19 given 可以不用了get 就表示拿到了，不需要再表达人家给的意思
24 live->life生活
26中华民族的话应该是nations
最后，Chrismas后应该加个is

Answer 3

the exact date varying according to the lunar calendar，你写的是一句话还是状语，但我看不出是什么状语，如果想写句子的话，得把varying改成varies才能做谓语，接着的falling可以，它的主语是Spring Festival ，可以省略主语和be动词。接下来Chinese people有点重复，Chinese本身已有中国人之意，所以宜把people去掉。sitting together watching 我觉得还是在together之后加个and比较好。 a new beginning of live，是不是打错了，应该是life吧。Chinese New Year eve dinner where a feast of delicacies are prepared and eaten.我觉得把and eaten.去掉比较好。The festival originated from the activities of offering sacrifices to gods or ancestors at the end of the year in the Yin and Shang dynasties.中year可以改成years.好好发挥，其实文章重要，现场发挥更重要，祝你成功！

Answer 4

The Spring Festival is celebrated by Chinese only one time in each year. the exact date is according to the lunar calendar during mid January to mid February. The Spring Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals for Chinese people. The festival originated from the activities of offering sacrifices to gods or ancestors at the end of the year in the Yin and Shang dynasties.Today, Chinese celebrate the New Year with family gathering and having dinners. The most important dinner is the traditional Chinese New Year eve dinner where a feast of delicacies will be prepared for family members. Houses will be cleaned for the big day and red trimmings will be placed on doorways and windows. Red packets filled with money are given by elders to the young during the 15 day's celebration and supposed to bring luck. Families will visit their relatives and friends, bringing greetings from place to place; children who tag along get given red packet from each family. Watching the Spring Festival Gala Evening is a relatively new custom. For Chinese people, gathering together to watching the show will bring happiness to the coming year.
The main topic of the celebration, of course, is family reunion and a beginning for a new year. The spring festival represent reunion and the start of something new for the Chinese nation, just like Christmas to western people.

感觉像机器翻译的啊。。。错误真的很多呢 我大概改一下，希望对你有帮助吧