Question

~~my dream job 英文作文~~?

Answer 1

有括符的地方，是修正处。 There are (various jobs) in the world
but different people (is) attracted by different jobs because everyone has his own interest and (goal). Many people consider an ideal job as a me of making more money and living more fortably. It may sound reasonable because money is the ( implement) of ( living life). 1. 各种职业various jobs
不必再有kind of. 2. 目标goal，非destination
后1字的意思较适用于路程的目的地、终点，此处以goal为合适。 3. 金钱是生活的基础，此话有待商榷，有人会不同意，应说”工具，手段”较无争议。 As far as my ideal job is concerned
(I hope) to be a designer because I want to (design) the most interesting things to (impress) (people)
(and) I am also going to show the wisdom of Hong Kong to the whole world. 1.I think 是多余，不必要的述叙（赘词） 2.通常”设计”是要给大众（people）深刻的印象(impress) 3.两句间加and来使语气连接，毕竟两句语意是连接的，并非不相干的两句话。 In a word
I want to be a successful person. To achieve make my dream e true
I am going to New York in 10 years because that is a city of fashion. I will study there in order to widen my view and improve myself. (But now I should) be responsible for my schoolwork. 1. achieve my dream，在中文可以说得通，但在英文，此dream代表什么？好梦或坏梦？make my dream e true较能明白表示出作者的意思。 2. I will be responsible for，由前后句的文意，应改为I should “我必须、我应该”，意思会较贴切。 In addition
I (plan) to take art lessons
(but to) follow this road course (of) designer must have deep knowledge of the art
(and) have the reaction ability of (them)
(which) is able to quickly (reflect) the (minds) (on) the paper
(and) also (must have) the great ability of observation and insight. 1. 用了太多的I am going to，应换一下表达方式， I plan to……… 2. 关系代名词that不可接于逗点之后，即其前不可有逗点，which则可。 Of course
the most important (are) the exquisite (handicraft) and (knowledge) of the cloth
then the clothes can be truly (express its) "life"
if not (do it) by hand
(just) simply by (words)
Can only count all in vain. (And having) knowledge of human anatomy is also very important . 1. out of life 此句的确实意思，须再研究。 I will never give up(
nothing) is impossible
(and )I believe I can make my dream e true as long as I try my best (constantly). 1.nothing……. 此句与前句的文意是相贯连的，n 应小写，前使用逗号。
You ve really show the world the Hong Kong style of English. Correct English should be
for example: - everyone has his own interest and destiny. [destination is a location] - an ideal job as (a) mean(s) of making more money. [a mean / me 单众数) - money is the foundation of life. [自创的哲学结论] money is fundamental in life. money is essential for life. 钱是生活的最基本需要。[这样写仍会使人否定，但最少是英语人用以表达"基本或必要"的用词] - I want to make the most interesting things to surprise everyone else [意思是"除了自己之外"everyone else] - In ONE word. [不是in a word] - I am going to New York in 10 years. [句式上说"我在十年后现在正在去纽约途中"]假如是将来的计划在十年内要去NY=I will be going to New York in 10 years.假如是用错in 10 years其实是你已计划即将起行会在那里住上十年。I will go to New York for 10 years. - to broaden my view [中国香港学生只懂中文"扩阔"视野写成英文字wide] - follow this track [自创road course=路线图，果然是"创作师"] of a designer... - must have in depth knowledge [中国香港学生只能懂一个deep字的一种form] -
then have the reaction ability of designers have
that is able to quickly describe the mind in the paper
[totally lost my mind!] - moreover also 双重同义字"更加又" [果然是除了作者自己外所有人都很惊讶这是甚么?] -
the most important is the exquisite handwork and understanding of the cloth
the clothes can be truly out of "life"
if not by hand
to include manual
simply by deleting the sentence. [delete this sentence吧] - Can only count all in vain. [Yes
all these are in vain.] - Also have knowledge of human anatomy is very important. [Sentence without subject
inplete sentence.]