Question

帮我修改完善一片英语作文、在线等。

Li Fang was heart-broken,he couldn't afford the truth, but it is real,His girlfriend didn't come for the gate."She must forget me ,and also my love!"He thought.
To his surprise,He saw his girlfriend waiting for him in the tea shop with her Valentine gift.He was so ____（后悔？应该用个什么性质的词）that he has thrown his gifts away! "Now the wrong one is me..."He said to himself."I'm so stupid and i make the mistake without thinking...What can ido to make her forgive me ?"
"Hey,Li Fang Why did you come so late ? I've been waiting for you for a long time?" Hu Jin said.Li Fang gave her a hug and said:"Sorry... i went to the worng place! Let's go inside."
They found a table and set down."This is my Valentine gift,for you!"Hu Jin said."Thanks for your gift,I like it!"Li Fang just smiled without saying any about his gift.Hu Jin felt alittle confused but she didn"t say anything.Time passed quickly,Li Fang
still didn't take any action.His girlfriend became alittle angry.She thought"He must explain it,or I'll never forgive him."
The next day,Hu Jin recived a bunch of roses with a card in it.It said:"Every one give gift to his lover on Valentines Day,but I promise to look afer you and love you all the time even normal days.I love you, it have nothing with the date.(这句话，我爱你，跟时间无关，应该怎么说，我觉得我写的不太好。各位。）That is the reason why I don't want to give a gift to you yesterday." "Hu Jin,can you accept my love ?"Suddenly,Li Fang appeared, with a ring in his hand.
Hu Jin couldn't help crying.（她忍不住哭了起来，是这么写的吗）"You know it !（我想写“你认为呢！”不知道怎么说）"She ran to Li Fang and gave him a big hug.

谢谢各位高手了。好的追分，帮我看看吧。
深深地拥抱，可以用Deeply 吗

Answer 1

改动后文章如下，

Li Fang was heart-broken.(一个句子不能有两个动词！）he couldn't afford the truth, but it is real. His girlfriend didn't come for the date."She must forget me ,as well as my love!", he thought.
To his surprise,He saw his girlfriend waiting for him in the tea shop with her Valentine gift. He regreted so much that he has thrown his gifts away! "Now i am the one to blame..."He said to himself."I was so stupid and i made this mistake without thinking...What can i do to make her forgive me now?"
"Hey,Li Fang Why you come so late ? I've been waiting for you for a long time.", Hu Jin said. Li Fang gave her a hug and said:"Sorry... i went to the worng place! Let's go inside."
They found a table and sat down."This is my Valentine gift,for you!"Hu Jin said."Thanks for your gift,I like it so much!"Li Fang just smiled without saying anything about his gifts.Hu Jin felt a little confused but she didn't say anything. Time passed quickly,Li Fang still didn't take any action. His girlfriend became a little angry. She thought: "He got to explain it,or I'll never forgive him."
The next day, Hu Jin recived a bunch of roses with a card in it. It said:"Everyone gives gifts to his lover on Valentines Day,but I promise to look afer you and love you all the time even normal days.I will take care of you and love you all the time, no matter if its Valentines Day or not!" That is the reason why I didn't want to give a gift to you yesterday." "Hu Jin,can you accept my love ?"Suddenly,Li Fang appeared, with a ring in his hand.
Hu Jin couldn't help crying:"What do you think? of course!" She ran to Li Fang and gave him a warm hug.

自己改的，你看看，然后再补充

不太好，你可以说：
1.He greeted her with a loving hug.
他以一个深情的拥抱来迎接她。
2.She gave her mother an affectionate hug.
她紧紧拥抱著她的母亲。
3.She gave her daughter a big hug.
她紧紧拥抱着她的女儿。

还有什么问题快问，我要下了

Answer 2

Li Fang was heart-broken,he couldn't afford the truth, but it WAS real,His girlfriend didn't come TO the gate."She must HAVE FORGOTTEN me ,and also my love!"He thought.
To his surprise,He saw his girlfriend waiting for him in the tea shop with her Valentine gift.He was so __REGRETTED__（后悔？应该用个什么性质的词）that he HAD thrown his gifts away! "Now IT IS MY MISTAKE..."He said to himself."I'm so stupid and I MADE the mistake without thinking...What can I do to make her forgive me ?"
"Hey,Li Fang Why did you come so late ? I've been waiting for you for a long time?" Hu Jin said.Li Fang gave her a hug and said:"Sorry... i went to the worng place! Let's go inside."
They found a table and SAT down."This is my Valentine gift,for you!"Hu Jin said."Thanks for your gift,I like it!"Li Fang just smiled without saying any about his gift.Hu Jin felt a little confused but she didn"t say anything.Time passed quickly,Li Fang
still didn't take any action.His girlfriend became a little angry.She thought"He must explain it,or I'll never forgive him."
The next day,Hu Jin recived a bunch of roses with a card in it.It said:"Every one giveS A gift to his lover on Valentines Day,but I promise to look afer you and love you all the time even ON normal days.I love you, it HAS nothing TO DO with TIME.(这句话，我爱你，跟时间无关，应该怎么说，我觉得我写的不太好。各位。）That is why I DIDN'T want to give a gift to you yesterday." "Hu Jin,can you accept my love ?"Suddenly,Li Fang appeared, with a ring in his hand.
Hu Jin couldn't help crying.（她忍不住哭了起来，是这么写的吗）"YOU KNEW IT !（我想写“你认为呢！”不知道怎么说）"She ran to Li Fang and gave him a big hug.

Answer 3

深深的拥抱不可以用deeply，可以用tightly。

Answer 4

so reget