Question

求大神帮忙修改一篇英语作文 感激不尽！

Answer 1

When Li Hua decided to sign up for the school sports meeting, everyone was surprised. Said a classmate after hear kind; "Hey, Li Hua, your body is so weak, OK? Don't force the body!" But Li Hua held his hand, a face of strong said; "There is a will, there is a way, not tried and how do you know? I will insist in the end!"

During the game, Li Hua is very hard, but still lags behind other players, Li Huayi is anxious, want to catch up to, but he accidentally fell on the ground, his glasses broken, but he did not give up, or stick to run. Although he was the last one to reach the terminal, but he won the applause of the courage, and the cup of honour!

As a famous saying; "forever, forever, never give up! "

我在国外学习英语所以我也只是个学生。我觉得（不一定对）
During the game, Li Hua is very hard, but still lags behind other players, Li Huayi is anxious, want to catch up to, but he accidentally fell on the ground
这一段话，你用的是一般现在时，但是後面
but he did not give up, or stick to run. Although he was the last one to reach the terminal, but he won the applause of the courage, and the cup of honour!

你又是一般过去时，所以我觉得，前面那一个和第二个同样的时间的话也应该是一般过去时。

还有一个地方
his glasses broken
这个地方一般说
His glasses were broken因为应该用被动语态，眼镜不会自己破掉，是被破掉就像是我们不会说：the car crashed 都是说 the car was crashed 因为车不会自己碰撞，只会被动的碰撞

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