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英语高手请进！十万火急！！

以下是我的研究生复试口语的自我介绍，由于个人英语水平有限，请英语高手帮忙修改一下，语法、单词、结构、词组等方面修改一下，改得漂亮点 ，通俗易懂，不拗口，便于记忆，关系重大，拜托大家
Good morning/afternoon, dear professors. I feel so glad to meet all of you here. I am ***,23 years old. I graduated from ZheJiang Ocean University major in mathematics and application mathematics in June,2010.
I am aggressive , independent and very fond of science. I have many hobbies,I like music、sports, because they can relax myself and build my body stronger . And I like English very much, I improve my oral and listening ability by listening English songs .What ' more, I passed CET- 6 already. But I do think my English is not good enough,so I will do my best to study English.
There 's a famous saying ' god help who helps themselves '. Therefore, I seize every chance that given to me and never give up. I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning. So I work hard. Because I am interested in mathematics so that I want to get a key to ZheJiang Normal University further my education. Of course, if I am given a chance to study Fundamental Mathematics in this famous University, I will stare no effort to master a good command of advance knowledge.
Well, that 's who am I .Thanks for your attention.
非常感谢大家帮助！！！
基础数学专业 ，3分钟自我介绍

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Good morning/afternoon, dear professors. I am very honored to have this interview. I am ***,23 years old. I graduated from ZheJiang Ocean University major in June,2010 and majored in mathematics and application mathematics.
I am an ambitious, independent person who have a lot of interest in science. 喜欢科学，举例说明。

And I also like English very much, I improve my speaking and listening ability by listening to English news.尽管你听歌，说听新闻比听歌好。

Along with this passion to english, I have passed CET-6. Of course I do NOT think my English is good enough,so I will do my best to study it.
There 's a famous saying ' god help who helps themselves '. Therefore, I seize every chance that given to me and never give up. I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning. So I work hard. Because I am interested in mathematics so that I want to get a key to ZheJiang Normal University further my education. Of course, if I am given a chance to study Fundamental Mathematics in this famous University, I will stare no effort to master a good command of advance knowledge.

Well, that 's who am I .Thanks for your attention.

你是要考英语专业还是考数学专业。怎么对本专业的爱好还有例子一个没有。
首先自我介绍，
然后介绍对数学的喜爱，
然后介绍大学中学习数学有意义的事情和感想。
将来的计划。
感谢。

hope it help.