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谁能帮我看看我写的英文译文有没有语法错误，明天答辩，急用！！！！谢谢！！！真的很谢谢！！ Abst

谁能帮我看看我写的英文译文有没有语法错误，明天答辩，急用！！！！谢谢！！！真的很谢谢！！
Abstract With the rapid development of electronic commerce, express industry plays an increasingly important role in its development process. However, objectively speaking, China's express delivery industry is in the beginning stages of development, there are many problems to be solved. November 11, 2009, Alibaba Lynx mall for the first time launched the "11.11" shopping carnival, since then the annual "11.11" were amazing record. Again and again a huge volume of transactions constantly refresh the transaction, however, the courier industry but then again and again it is a huge challenge. This paper studies the main reason for the logistics warehouse explosion in "11.11" period and make reasonable suggestions, First, combine the meaning of the logistics warehouse explosion, influences, and in recent years the "11.11" situation, Analysis of domestic logistics in the "11.11" during the express company warehouse explosion Problems and can be specific implementation initiatives. I hope to inspire logistics enterprises in the future development strategy, to the express delivery companies and related departments to deal with the courier warehouse explosion problem to help. Keywords: Express warehouse explosion; express delivery; reason; Strategy

Answer 1

With the rapid development of electronic commerce, express industry plays an increasingly important role in its 【developing】 process. However, objectively speaking, China's express delivery industry is in the beginning stages of development, there are many problems to be solved. November 11, 2009, Alibaba Lynx mall launched the "11.11" shopping carnival【for the first time】, since then the annual "11.11" 【breaks many amazing records year after year】. Again and again【，】 a huge 【number】 of transactions constantly refresh the 【不知道你这里要表达的是什么，但是怎么也不应该是transaction吧？而且还是不加s的】, however, the courier industry 【这一大坨完全看不懂=。=没法改】. This paper studies the main reason for the logistics warehouse explosion in "11.11" period and 【makes】 reasonable suggestions【标点有误，请改用句号或冒号】 First, 【I】combine the meaning 【and the influences】of the logistics warehouse explosion, and the "11.11" situation【in recent years】【标点也有问题，也不知道你的断句在何处，analysis也是要combine进去的东西还是不是？后面这个句子就肯定有问题了】 Analysis of domestic logistics in the "11.11" 【, during which there exist some problems called】【the explosions of express companies' warehouses,】 can be specific 【这里需要adj.你搜来的词肯定有误，但是我不晓得你到底要讲什么，无法帮你改】 initiatives.
（First之后也再无Second, Then, At last等字眼出现了）
（你对待大小写那么随意，读的人断句都断不明白，根本没耐心继续看了）
I hope 【this paper can】 【help，别用inspire，这词太自不量力了，野心过大】 logistics enterprises 【in their future development strategies】, 【and can help the】express delivery companies and related departments to deal with【the explosions of express companies' warehouses】 better.

一些专门的词汇我没有改动，你的领域我的判断应该没有你来得准~
注意很多大小写和标点的精准，我改过的句子 不加上 我给出的标点 就会出问题
有些地方你用的company，有些地方用的enterprise，如果他们是同一家公司，这样搞会搞出误会的
“快递、速递、物流”等等说法也是一直在变，中文是否统一，实际是否指同一产业？

前面的句子像四级作文，还是很老款的作文模板=。=
中半段开始往后给我的感觉就是：这孩子已经不认真了，在瞎用翻译器了=。=
替我自己难受（直接给我中文让我译还简单些），也替主持答辩的老师的心情担忧。。。

Answer 2

不敢班门弄斧