Question

麻烦帮忙修改一下这篇英语作文（高一）尽量详细些，谢谢！

Answer 1

Recently we had a in-class debate about if it would be better to purchase the entry tickets to the attractions at the travel agency in advance than purchasing at the admission office. Everybody brought up an opinion.
Those who are for purchasing ahead of visiting said that pre-purchased tickets are usually cheaper than what you will have to pay at the entrance. Moreover it saves you the time of lining up for buying the tickets at the admission office, and thus allows you to visit more viewpoints. Furthermore, the pre-purchasing would provide information about the number of visitors to the admission office in the first place, so that they would be able to inform the coming visitors of whether the number of tourists have reached the capacity. A better control system will improve the quality of the service they provide.
However, many classmates argued that some may not like to visit some of the attractions as the tour package includes all the admission fees. It will be a waste to spend money on what you would not enjoy. Besides, the tickets are expensive.
In my opinion, ... I don't follow... What is your main point?
1. it should be optional (not required) for the tourists to pay for the entry?
2. tourists should pay for the entry tickets in advance of their visit at the travel agency?
3. once you have chosen the package tours, you have to pay for all the admissions even though you might not be going to visit some of them.
Which one of these is your point?
Also, there's no "through tickets." you can either say admission fees or entry fees or tickets.

Answer 2

1. if tourists should buy through tickets at the tourist spots

2. some classmates agree to buy  through tickets ,because it can save much time for themselves

3. while other classmates argue the opposite is better,they think through tickets are only convenient for one part of  tourists

4. expensive

5. it is one of the  reasons  why some tourists don't want to .......