Question

假设你是李华，你的父母总是喜欢替你包办一切，你觉得很苦恼。请你根据以下提示给某英语报社编辑写一封信

假设你是李华，你的父母总是喜欢替你包办一切，你觉得很苦恼。请你根据以下提示给某英语报社编辑写一封信。1. 简述现象（两种）；2. 分析弊端（两个方面）；3. 你的观点或建议。注意：1. 词数120左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。参考词汇：独立性independenceDear Editor,I’d like to tell you some of my problems with my parents in daily life. My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours sincerely,Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor, I’d like to tell you some of my problems with my parents in daily life. My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me. They choose the school and subjects for me. Sometimes even clothing and daily timetables have to be decided by them. In my opinion, deciding everything for children does not help them but harm them in many ways. Firstly, it will make children lack independence, which is unfavorable to their development in the long run. Secondly, in many cases parents’ decisions go against children’s personal ideas and interests, which will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth. I do believe to grow to be independent is a natural way for everybody. Parents should give us chances to make our own decisions. They may help us make choices instead of replacing us to make choices. Yours sincerely, Li Hua

试题分析：本文是一篇提纲类作文，但是只是大概的提纲没有具体的要点，对考生的要求非常高，需要考生有较强的组织语言的能力和运用语言的功底。本文的话题是父母总是喜欢包办一切，考生所熟悉的，具有可写性。在写作之前，注意谋篇布局，文章应该是三段，第一段提及这种现象，第二段谈弊端，第三段分析原因提出建议。在写作时要注意选词如independently，Gradually，accompany等高级词汇的运用。同时运用合适的连接词和句型。最后要注意对文章的润色。 【亮点说明】My parents tend to make almost all decisions for me.这里有固定短语：tend to do In my opinion, deciding everything for children does not help them but harm them in many ways.这句话用了动名词做主语， it will make children lack independence, which is unfavorable to their development in the long run.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， in many cases parents’ decisions go against children’s personal ideas and interests, which will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth.这句话也是非限制性定语从句， I do believe to grow to be independent is a natural way for everybody.这句话用了强调，还有范文还使用了 Firstly, Secondly,这样的关联词，使文章更加连贯。