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帮我改改我的英语作文

题目是“你的一个好朋友要来上海看世博，你给他介绍情况”我没打把开头给的部分，只把我接它写的打上来，大家帮我改改。谢了~
I think you must in order to visit the Expo 2010 Shanghai China.So ,I will tell you something about it before you get there.
The event,which is scheduled from May 1,to October 31,will last 6 months.It will be held in the city of China,Shanghai.The theme of Expo 2010 is Better City,Better Life,which is very simple but meaningful .When you get there,you can take bus or subway to the centre of Expo.It is convenient to find the place of Expo.There will be more than 200 countries and international organziations attending to.According to the new survey,there will be more than 70 million people visting there.
I`m looking forward to meeting you.

Answer 1

in order to do sth.是为了干什么的意思。所以你的第一句就有问题。建议改为 I think you'd better visit the Expo 2010 Shanghai China ,it is worth doing that .
第二段建议改为：...which is scheduled to be held from May 1...
bigest city of China...with the theme of "Better City,Better Life"...
you can either ...or subway ...attend it
语法错误大概就这样了，但你还有一些逻辑错误——你都说了是5月1号到10月31了谁还不知道有6个月啊