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麻烦修改英语作文~按高考25分标准改分，有语言点错误一定麻烦改一下，最好提点小建议，谢谢~^-^

作文的题目是：随着旅游业的发展，越来越多的人喜欢旅游，那么你同意导游这个职业吗？
要求：120词以上，陈列至少三条理由。

With the rapid development of tourism,traveling is becoming more and more popular.I think when we are traveling,have a guide in our group is necessary.

First,people always like to travel in where they have never been to.So,they are easy to get lose without a guide .Second,a guide can help you to find the best way to travel.For example,if you are traveling in Expo,you must feel difficult to decide which embassy to visit first without advice. Third,the guide will introduce you some interesting history and stories of the place of interest.Besides,a guide can make all of us be active by singing a song or playing a game.

Considering all above,I do agree with tour guide.

悬赏较少，可是真诚的感谢您的帮助~

Answer 1

they are easy to get lose 用it's easy to get lose 更好
you must feel difficult,feel 改为find it 更好。
整体感觉的话语法错误不多，不过感觉表达起来都是中文的模式，比如我上面改的。还有整个语言比较平白，没有复句单句结合，复杂词汇也用的不多。
当然内容还算充实的。综合起来个人认为得个17分 吧。当然继续加油啊。希望你高考得20分以上。。

Answer 2

travell where 而不是 in where having a guide 不是have 还有句子不太好 25 分好像太高了点

Answer 3

1.having a guide in our group is necessary.
2.travel to the place where they have never been to
3the guide will introduce some places of interest to you
4 make us active by singing a song or playing a game.

Answer 4

语法错误：
1、having a guide
2、可在in where中间加一个places能更好地表达你的意思
3、get lost
4、visit firstly此处强调第一次，用firstly更多见
5、make us active 去掉be

你的条理性不错，句式也不单一，缺点是语法错误多了一点，而且结尾太过平淡难以吸引阅卷老师。总上考虑，满分25分的话，可以给到21分吧。