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（悬赏20财富值！）帮助修改初中英语作文

这里有一篇英语作文，大家帮忙修改一下，要把文中的语法错误找出来，对于有的简单句，诸位有法子让句子更丰富、更“高深”、更华丽的，也可修改，另外还要加一个结尾，结尾要有关于友谊的升华。多谢诸位了！悬赏财富值20！限期：2010年8月28日18:00。大家可以把修改后的作文直接发在下面（跟帖）。----by:John

文题：A person who helped me a lot
正文：For me,school life is one of the best part of my life.One of the reason is that I have many friends in school.
My best friend is Tom.He is a boy with black hair.He likes swimming,playing soccer and telling jokes.He is smart,friendly and helpful.
I often shared my joys and sorrows with him and was always listened to carefully.
Two month ago,I got injured in the basketball match.He came to the basketball court immediately.Then,he took me to the hospital.Because of my hurted leg,I can't go to school.He went to hospital and didn't mind spending his time helping me study lessons.I'm very happy that I can have such a good friend.
结尾...

Answer 1

For me, school life is one of the best part of my life now.I love it very much.One of the reason is that I can have many friends in the school.
My best friend is a good boy called Tom ..He is a boy with black .He has many hobbies like swimming,playing soccer and telling jokes to his classmates.He is smart,friendly and helpful.For eaxmple, a little girl lost heiself on Tom's way home last month ,he helped her and brought some hot bread for her . Finally,the girl got her home safely.Later,he never shows it off.We all think he is such an excellent boy that he can be ready for helping peple anytime.
I often shared my joys and sorrows with him and he always listened to me carefully.He is aslo patient enough to find the mistakes in my homework.
I will never forgot that thing. Two month ago,I got injured in the basketball match.He came to the basketball court immediately.Then,he took me to the hospital because of my hurted leg.I can't go to school those days. .He went to hospital and didn't mind spending his time helping me learn the test lessons.I'm very happy that I can have such a good friend Tom.
I have maken friends with Tom for two years. In fact ,we am helping each other now.I believe that we can be best friengs forever!A good friend can bring you much power and happiness!Isn't it?
我写得这样应该还可以吧，我把里面加了一些事例生动点，还有高深的反义疑问句哦，差不多是初二到初三之间的水平，可以吗，如果内容更广些就能写得更好了。可以稍微修改点就OK了。

Answer 2

文题：A person who helped me a lot
正文：For me,school life is one of the best parts of my life.The most important reason is that I have many friends in school.
My best friend is Tom.He is a boy with short black hair. He has many hobbies like swimming,playing soccer and telling jokes to his classmates.He is smart,friendly and helpful.
I often shared my joys and sorrows with him and he always listened to me carefully.
As we all known,a friend in need is a friend indeed. Two month ago,I got injured in the basketball match.He came to the basketball court immediately. Quickly ,he took me to the hospital.Because of my hurted leg,I can't go to school.He went to the hospital everyday and didn't mind spending his time helping me study lessons.
I'm very happy that I can have such a good friend. I’ll value our friendship forever.

Answer 3

文题：A person who helped me a lot
正文：In my opinion,school life is one of the best part of my life.One of the reason is that I have many friends in school.
My best friend is Tom.He is a boy with black hair.He likes swimming,playing soccer and telling jokes.He is smart,friendly and helpful.
I often shared my joys and sorrows with him.
Two month ago,I got injured in a basketball match unluckiky.He came to the basketball court immediately.Then,he took me to the hospital.Because of my hurted leg,I can't go to school.He spent most of his spare time helping me with my lessons.I'm very happy that I can have such a good friend.
Tom always helps me a lot.

Answer 4

I often shared my joys and sorrows with him and was always listened to carefully.后面有问题and I always listened to him carefully.

你文章最后一句放在结尾For without words, in friendship, all thoughts, all desires, all expectations are born and shared, with joy that is unacclaimed. I'm very happy that I can have such a good friend

Answer 5

For me,school life is one of the best parts of my life.The most important reason is that I have many good friends in school.
My best friend is Tom , who with black hair.He has a lot of hobbies ,such as swimming,playing soccer and telling jokes.He is smart,friendly and helpful. I often shares my joys and sorrows with him and he was always listens to carefully.
As we all known , a friend in need is a friend indeed.Two month ago,I got injured during the basketball match.He came to the basketball court immediately.Then,he sent me to the hospital.Because of my hurted leg,I can't go to school,he went to hospital everyday and didn't mind spending his time helping me study lessons.I'm very happy because I can have such a good friend like Tom.
A life without a friend is a life without the sun!