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MyValuablePresentLastSunday,Ihadmybirthday.IreceivedaspecialpresentfrommyDad.Itwasadi...
My Valuable Present
Last Sunday, I had my birthday. I received a special present from my Dad. It was a dictionary. It was thick and colourful. I was amazed to see the thing and opened it on my own. On the first page, I saw a sentence: Where there is a will, there is a way. I decided to look up words in it and learned it with my heart. I do believe if I tried my best to learn English, I will succeed. So it's a valuable present in my mind. 展开
Last Sunday, I had my birthday. I received a special present from my Dad. It was a dictionary. It was thick and colourful. I was amazed to see the thing and opened it on my own. On the first page, I saw a sentence: Where there is a will, there is a way. I decided to look up words in it and learned it with my heart. I do believe if I tried my best to learn English, I will succeed. So it's a valuable present in my mind. 展开
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My Valuable Present
Last Sunday, I had my birthday. I received a special present which was bought by(加上了定于从句) my Dad. Opening the present,I was amamzed(用了非谓,在句中很提分).(要注意语序,先打开,才知道里面是什么)It was a dictionary.And(注意衔接) it was not only thick but (用了not only...but also...句式)colourful. On the first page, I saw a sentence: Where there is a will, there is a way. I would(用decide不是非常恰当) look up the new words in it and learned them(注意代词的单复数形式) by(此处应该用介词by,另外不用加物主代词,表示“用心”)heart. I do believe if I try(不用变形) my best to learn English, I will succeed. (不包含因果关系)It's a valuable present to me.
Last Sunday, I had my birthday. I received a special present which was bought by(加上了定于从句) my Dad. Opening the present,I was amamzed(用了非谓,在句中很提分).(要注意语序,先打开,才知道里面是什么)It was a dictionary.And(注意衔接) it was not only thick but (用了not only...but also...句式)colourful. On the first page, I saw a sentence: Where there is a will, there is a way. I would(用decide不是非常恰当) look up the new words in it and learned them(注意代词的单复数形式) by(此处应该用介词by,另外不用加物主代词,表示“用心”)heart. I do believe if I try(不用变形) my best to learn English, I will succeed. (不包含因果关系)It's a valuable present to me.
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