Question

帮我看看我的文章有什么错误吗，谢谢噢

Report on: Consumers’ Habit Analysis

Introduction
This report aims to find out consumers’’ habit and what’s in their mind by analyzing the date.

Findings
In view of the turnover, the supermarket department is the rank No.1, whose turnover is far more than another two and the cosmetics’ turnover decreased drastically. In terms of growth, the clothes department and the supermarket department are always in a consolidated rate which due to the match for tendency. In another hand, the situation of the clothes department is not optimistic, owing to the lack of variety. As for complaints, it is glad to see that the customers are satisfied with the shopping ambience after we updated our air condition system.

Conclusion
The lack of cosmetics’ variety has been the bottleneck for improvement.

Recommendations
The company should do some survey about cosmetics to know what the consumers’ need.

Answer 1

1、aim at doing 比较顺吧，aim to do貌似很主观，有些像人作主语的样子。
2、data？还是date？
3、another two？ 不知道是不是我没看懂，总觉得应该是 the other two……
那个 which due to 的用法正确吗？我比较倾向于去掉which
4、in the other hand吧？
5、optimistic的主语多用人，这个句子好像得大改，有点中式英语的范儿。
6、it is 后边还是加cheering一类的词比较妥当，毕竟glad主语为人会好一些。
7、air conditioning system
8、what the consumers' need is
只是粗略的看了看，可能还有漏掉的……