Question

这个句子是否有语法错误、

Hunter is catching up with a fawn.
when I see the frist sunshine the river is going through the forest.
And the light is shotting on the fish.
At this moment,l hear the sound of gun,suddenly and violently.
I put up any head the cloud look like the blood .
suddenly, I can hear a bear coming.
thank you for coming into my room.
Thank you for coming into my life.
so,I will love everday.

Answer 1

原：I can also exprience the way of how foreigners living.
改：I can also exprience the way how foreigners live.
: )

Answer 2

没有语法错误 写的蛮好，是从哪本书抄下来的吧

Answer 3

没那么夸张吧

Answer 4

还是有个别错误的，改后应该是这样的：
Hunter is catching up with a fawn.
When I see the first sunshine going through the forest.
And the light is shooting on the fish.
At this moment,l hear the sound of a gun,suddenly and violently.
I raise my head and the cloud looks like blood .
Suddenly, I can hear a bear coming.
Thank you for coming into my room.
Thank you for coming into my life.
So,I will love every day.

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