Question

帮忙修改检查下初二英语作文，急，10号，6点40之前，追加20分

I have a best friend!
She usually exercises three times a week.She always goes shop .she often goes skateboard.And she sometimes watches TV.She likes watching "English Today "and "Healthy Livinh".And she often goes to the library.
As for her lifestyles.I think she's pretty healthy.She drink milk every day.She eats fruit three times a week.She never drinks coffee.Because it's bad for her health. of course ,she loves junk food,like chocolate,cola,and chip.But she eat it once a week.She hardly ever surfs the Internet.Oh,and she sleeps ten hours every night.She enjoys her lifestyles.

这是我的原创作文，明天要交，帮忙修改下，要在10号，早上6点40分之前哦，帮忙啦，又快又好的追加20分！

Answer 1

有错误或需要修改的地方我用括号括起来，如下：

I have a best friend!
最好这里加一下，她叫什么名字，她是我最好的朋友，然后引入下文 。
(I have a best friend. Her name is Wang Mei. She is my classmate and she lives next to mine.)
意思是：我有一个最好的朋友，她的名字叫王梅，她是我的同学，她家住我家隔壁。

She usually exercises three times a week. She always goes (shopping). She often goes (skateboarding). And she sometimes watches TV. She likes watching "English Today "and "Healthy Living". And she often goes to the library.

As for her lifestyles, I think she's pretty healthy. She (drinks) milk every day. She eats fruit three times a week. She never drinks coffee. Because it's bad for her health. Of course, she loves junk food, like chocolate, cola, and (chips). But she (eats) (them) once a week. She hardly ever surfs (on) the Internet. Oh, and she sleeps ten hours every night. She enjoys her lifestyles.

最好这里再加上一点我和这位好朋友一起做的一些事，突出她和我的关系“最好”啊。
(We go to and from school together by bus every day. We often do homework and study together. We practise English dialogues every week. We are the best friends.)
意思是：我们每天一起坐公交车上下课。我们经常一起做作业学习。我们每周一起练英语对话。我们是最好的好朋友。

这样这篇文章就前后呼应，对得上题，并有始有终。希望能帮到你！

Answer 2

goes shop改成goes shopping
goes skateboard 改成 goes skateboarding
goes to the library改library为复数
She drink milk 在drink后加s
chip加s
But she eat it once a week 在eat后加s，it改成them

Answer 3

I have a best friend!
She usually exercises three times a week.She always goes (shoping) .she often goes （skateboarding）.And she sometimes watches TV.She likes watching "English Today "and "Healthy Livinh".And she often goes to the library.
As for her lifestyles.I think (she)it's pretty healthy.She (drinks) milk (everyday).She eats fruit three times a week.She never drinks coffee.(because小写) it's bad for her health. (however用你的衔接不顺) ,she loves junk food,like chocolate,cola,and （chips）.But she （eats them） once a week.She hardly ever surfs the Internet.Oh,and she sleeps ten hours every night.She enjoys her lifestyles.括号里的都是改的，中间句子衔接就不改了，很容易改变全文结构，只改了错误的用法

Answer 4

I have a best friend!
最好这里加一下，她叫什么名字，她是我最好的朋友，然后引入下文 。
(I have a best friend. Her name is Wang Mei. She is my classmate and she lives next to mine.)
意思是：我有一个最好的朋友，她的名字叫王梅，她是我的同学，她家住我家隔壁。

She usually exercises three times a week. She always goes (shopping). She often goes (skateboarding). And she sometimes watches TV. She likes watching "English Today "and "Healthy Living". And she often goes to the library.

As for her lifestyles, I think she's pretty healthy. She (drinks) milk every day. She eats fruit three times a week. She never drinks coffee. Because it's bad for her health. Of course, she loves junk food, like chocolate, cola, and (chips). But she (eats) (them) once a week. She hardly ever surfs (on) the Internet. Oh, and she sleeps ten hours every night. She enjoys her lifestyles.

最好这里再加上一点我和这位好朋友一起做的一些事，突出她和我的关系“最好”啊。
(We go to and from school together by bus every day. We often do homework and study together. We practise English dialogues every week. We are the best friends.)
意思是：我们每天一起坐公交车上下课。我们经常一起做作业学习。我们每周一起练英语对话。我们是最好的好朋友。

这样这篇文章就前后呼应，对得上题，并有始有终。希望能帮到你！