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英语作文检查有没有错误

As you know,Shanghai hosts the 2010 World Expo.So I went to Shanghai with * and *,our former classmates, during the summer holidays.Today,I’ll share my journey with you.We set off on the 8th of August.After three hours’s drive,we arrive at the place we live in, China Executive [iɡ'zekjutiv] Leadership ['li:dəʃip] Academy [ə'kædəmi] Pudong.The school is very large and there are many imposing [im'pəuziŋ] buildings.In the wonderful place,there were several black swans,which surprised us a lot.On the first day,we went to Shanghai Ocean Aquarium [ə'kwεəriəm] and Madame Tussaud's['mædəm tə'sɔ:dz].There are many famous people in Madame Tussaud's,such as Jacky Chan, Bill Gates,Yang Zhenning, Albert Einstein['ainstain] and so on.We went to Expo Park on the 9th of August.The weather was not very hot.It was unbelievable that we just visited two Pavilions.We waited for entering Japan pavilion in a queue [kju:] for more than six hours.What attracted me was a robert which could play the vilion.In my opinion,Japan pavilion just advertises toyota and other japanese enterprises ['entəpraiz].The visit was not a bit meaningful,but made me not a little tired.There are many delicious western food in Shanghai.We tried starbucks.A cup of Cappuccino [,kæpu'tʃi:nəu] was priced at about thirty yuan.It’s a little expensive.However,compared with Haagen-Dazs,the price is reasonable.This glass of ice-cream costs 68 yuan.The cake in Haagen-Dazs tasted good.We spent four days in shanghai and left on the 11th of August.It’s a pity that Love In Disguise [dis'ɡaiz] comes out on the 12th of August.

Answer 1

第一句:把you know 删掉，读起来太别扭，一看就知道不是纯种的英语，然后把之后的那个so 去掉， 将其之前的句号变成逗号。整个句子就是As Shanghai hosts the 2010 World Expo, I went to Shanghai with my former classmates during the summer holidays.

第三行有语法错误：应该是we arrived,lived

The school is very large and there are many imposing [im'pəuziŋ] buildings.不知道你在讲什么。

In the wonderful place,there were several black swans,which surprised us a lot.把the 换成this

What attracted me was a robert.你是想说机器人吗？应该是robot

The visit was not a bit meaningful,but made me not a little tired.那个a bit 和not a little tired 用在这里很怪（我只语法）

There are many delicious western food in Shanghai.We tried starbucks。这句话语有逻辑问题。你是在说只有上海有starbucks 吗？而且starbucks 是麦咖啡的啊，可以说说其他西方的食物。要不然酒吧之前那句here are many delicious western food in Shanghai改了。

It’s a little expensive。在little之前加个 bit

Answer 2

very good

Answer 3

好多错误啊