Question

麻烦各位英语高手帮忙修改篇英语作文、谢谢、

作文题目是：What's your problems in your life? How do you deal with it?

我是这样写的，麻烦大家帮忙看看有没有哪里有错、有的话帮忙提出来、谢谢、

Everyone has many problems in life. I have problems too. First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents. I usually solve the problems by talking with my parents. It helped a lot. Then,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise. Later on I realized that it's bad for my health. so I star to run everyday. Finally, I always make mistakes in life. So I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.

麻烦各位了、

Answer 1

1。你的语法还是不错的。就是要注意时态的前后一致。你在阐述生活中的事情。既然用了一般现在时，后面就都用这个时代，不要出现过去式。
2。 你用了first of all 和finally 但是我没见到secondly.所以要么去除，换别的词，要么中间插一个。而且这3个词一般用在作文的每个大段之前。
2。另外就是要注意用词，这个以后可以锻炼的，没问题。帮你小改改。

Everyone has many problems in life. I have problems too. First of all,sometimes I have disagreements with my parents. I usually solve problems by talking with my parents. It helps a lot. Secondly,I think I am a little lazy in my life.Because I don't want to do exercise. Later on， I realize that it's bad for my health. so I start to jogging everyday. Finally, I always make mistakes in life. But I regard these prombles as challenges.
I believe I can solve the problems well.