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I got your letter dating April 20th the day before yesterday.All of our family greatly delighted to learn that you are getting on very well with your subject.Time passes quickly.After a few weeks,you'll finish the middle school.What please us most is that you have made your mind to attend college examination this summer.What wonderful it is!Dad,as well as Mom and I,are with you.We wish you to make a better use of your time.The fuller preparations you make,the sure of success you'll be.
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Answer 1

I got your letter 【dating】(dated) April 20th the day before yesterday. All of our family （are）greatly delighted to learn that you are getting on very well with your subject. Time passes quickly. After a few (more) weeks, you'll finish the middle school. What 【please】(pleases) us most is that you have made your mind to attend college examination this summer. 【What】(How) wonderful it is! Dad, as well as Mom and I, are with you. We wish you to make a better use of your time. The fuller preparations you make, the 【sure】(surer) of success you'll be.

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I received your letter dated 20th April the day before yesterday. All of us are very delighted to learn that you are getting on very well with your study. Time really flies, you’ll complete your middle school study in a few more weeks. We are very pleased that you’ll take the college examinations this summer. It’s really wonderful! Mom, dad and I are all supportive of your decision. We hope that you’ll put in more time for the exam preparations; the more efforts you put in, the better your chances of success.

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Answer 2

dating 改为 dated, greatly delighted 改为 was greatly delighted, you are getting on 改为 you were getting on ,After a few weeks改为 A few weeks later, What wonderful it is!Dad,as well as Mom and I,are with you这句不知道说的是什么,不管怎样,are要改为is(是想说太好了,爸爸以及妈妈和我都和你在一起?还是说都支持你?),We wish you to make a better use of your time 改为We wish you make a better use of your time, The fuller preparations you make,the sure of success you'll be改为
The fuller preparations you make,the more success you'll be.
开始的几句还行,越到后面就越chinglish(中式英语),要想改好,后面的得重写