Question

求英语大神级别的高级教师给我作文评下分吧，万分感谢！

Answer 1

Dear
David,
I'm
very
glad
to
have
received
your
letter.You
asked
me
about
my
life
on
weekends.Now
I'll
tell
you
something
about
it.
【第一段写的很好！没有任何语法错误，用词和表达都准确无误。】
My
life
is
very
great.
How
【to】spend
【the】time
on
weekends
【is】
important
to
keep
my
health.In
the
morning,I
get
up
early【and
do
some
sports】.Then
I
listen
to
【some
】music
and
have
breakfast.This
is
【the】beginning
of
a
beautiful
day.After【having】lunch,
I
will
【then】study
from
1:00
pm
to
5:00
pm.In
the
evening,
I
【can】
watch
TV
【when
finishing】dinner.（修改后，和后一句话搭配起来，表达语义和逻辑更合理）
Isn't
【it】a
nice
day?
yours
lovely,
Zhang
Jun但是，第二段就有些明显的失误，具体见纠正【】内。
整体来看，需要注意课本常用句子在写作中的套用；另外，可以将内容写得更充实、更丰富，即，注意修饰词的作用。
总分15分的话，能得9——11分。
加油！还有一定提升空间。
祝你开心如意！