Question

帮忙批改一下英语作文吧

外籍教师Lynne任教期满准备回国，学校答应派车送她去机场。她在临行前一天写了张便条提醒办公室李老师 1．请检查(check on)明天的车是否落实，提醒司机(remind sb. of sth.提醒某人做某事)。 2．她之所以要确定一下，是因为太早不好叫出租车。 3．感谢费心，并感谢一年来的关心。 4．在学校一年来，生活愉快、难忘，很可能再来。 5．留下一些英语书给贵校图书馆，希望对学生有用。 字数：100—120个词。 Dear teacher Li, Tmorrow,I will come bake to my country.Could you help me to check on tmorrow car,and remind the driver of carrying me.Because,if so early,it is difficult to call taxi.And thanks for your help,and care about in the past one year.In the last year,I felt moving,and lived happies.I felt the students take me too much happiness.Then,it is possible to get back.At last,leave some English books to the school library.and hope these could help students's study. Hope to see you again. Lynne

Answer 1

在我看来你的作文层次清晰，内容全面，但是美中不足的是你的主语不应该由谓语动词充当，这是英语作文的大忌，同时也暴露出你对于英语句子细节的疏忽，通篇好几处help
others这是明显的动词短语，下次记得一定不要用错了。第二点是你的文章缺乏一定的连贯性，尤其是句子之间First,
help
others
can
make
us
feel
happy.
When
we
help
others,
they
will
say
“thanks”to
you
感觉没说完，所以今后也要在句子上在细节上下功夫啊。总体不错，所以我认为应该得11-12分，继续努力啊，come
on!