Question

英语高手过来帮我看下这句有没有语病

This is a simple demo from ysy which is a example for popup.In this demo there are too many bugs and errors which I can not save it.And I do only hope you make it as a demo.Thank you for your supports.

帮我修改下。让他“文辞优美”点，当然首先要求没有语病，谢谢啦。

Answer 1

见笑：
This is a simple demo from ysy as a test for pop-up.In this demo you may find many bugs and errors which I can not spare .And I do hope you just take it as a demo.Thank you for supporting.

关于你的语病：
1、which is a example ，a 应为an
2、there are too many bugs and errors which I can not save it。这句中多了个it，把it 去掉，否则为病句。
3、make 用词不当，把。。。当做。。。，应该用take
4、这个不是病句，只是Thank you for your supports. 英语里比较不喜欢一个单词反复选用，所以前面有了you，后面再有your比较累赘，当然，不算错。
5、不过，支持该是不可数名词吧？ 不该是your supports的，应去掉“s”。

Answer 2

This is a simple demo from ysy which is a example for popup.In this demo there are too many bugs and errors which I can not correct them. And I hope you can help me to make it as a demo. Thank you for your supports.