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帮忙修改一篇英语作文，希望英语高手帮忙看看，哪里有错误，帮忙修改一下，非常感谢啊，麻烦了，具体内容

Writing Directions:A. Study the following set of pictures carefully and write an essay in no less than200 B. Your essay must be written clearly on the ANSWER SHEET. C. Your essay should cover all the information provided and meet the requirements below: 1. Interpret the following pictures. 2. Predict the tendency of tobacco consumption and give your reason.

As is illustrated in the cartoon, the output of tobacco is about 14.2 billion pound. The population is 5.8 billion in the world while smokers are, approximately, 1.1 billion which means twenty percent people are smokers all over the world. and every year, we lost 200 billion dollars. What’s more, over 30 million people die of smoking directly and indirectly.
From the cartoon, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey such a message: smoking is harmful to health, however, the population of smokers is larger than the one that we image. All of us accept the fact that the smokers are so many that the market of tobacco is so huge. Meanwhile, economically, smoking cause huge losses. Besides, many people die of smoking. “no only is it smoking that kills people”, said Dr. Smith, ”but it is the fact that many people died from fire which is caused by smoking.” Obviously, smoking is dangerous.
To my best understanding, our government should require all the cigarette manufacturers to write that cigarettes carry a health warning in every package of cigarettes. A tax on cigarettes is also important. And ourselves ought to enhance our health awareness of the danger on smoking.
谢谢一楼的，但不是要翻译文章，而是帮忙看看是不是有语法或者别的地方的错误，帮忙纠正一下，不用翻译的，但还是谢谢啊！！

Answer 1

As is illustrated in the cartoon, the output of tobacco is about 14.2 billion 【pounds】. The population is 5.8 billion in the world while smokers are, approximately, 1.1 billion which means twenty percent 【of the population】 are smokers all over the world. 【And】 every year, we 【lose】 200 billion dollars 【as a result】. What’s more, over 30 million people die of smoking directly and indirectly.

From the cartoon, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey such a message: smoking is harmful to health, however, the population of 【smoker】 is larger than the one 【we have imagined】. All of us 【have accepted】 the fact that 【there are so many smokers】 that the market of tobacco is so huge. Meanwhile, economically【speaking】, smoking 【results in】 huge losses. Besides, many people die 【due to】 smoking. “【Not】 only is it smoking that kills people”, said Dr. Smith, ”but it is the fact that many people died from fire which is caused by smoking.” Obviously, smoking is dangerous.

To my best understanding, our government should require all the cigarette manufacturers 【to include a health warning on】 every package of cigarettes 【about its possible dangers】. 【Taxes】 on cigarettes 【are】 also important. And ourselves ought to enhance our health 【awarenesses on】 the 【dangers of】 smoking.

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总结：一般来说还是可以的。意思也表达明白了。可是我想你还可以考虑一下吸二手烟的问题（二手烟：second hand smoking或passive smoking），还有就是因为吸烟引起的肺癌，而导致的健康问题等（肺癌：lung cancer）。

Answer 2

用你文字翻译的结果是：写作方向:。研究下面的组图仔细地而且写一篇不少于than200你的文章必须写清楚在答案纸上。你的文章应该涵盖所有提供的信息和满足要求如下:1。下面的图片。2 .解释。预测趋势烟草消费的和给你的原因。

作为了卡通,输出的烟草是1420亿磅约。58亿美元的人口是世界上大约同时烟民,110亿美元。这意味着百分之二十的人吸烟,每年world.,我们失去了200亿美元。更重要的是,30多万人死于与吸烟有关的直接或间接的。
从动画,我们可以得出这样的结论:漫画家就是想表达了这样一个信息:吸烟有害健康,但是,人口的吸烟者比我们的形象。我们所有的人都接受这一事实,吸烟是很多市场的烟草太大了。同时,从经济上来说,吸烟造成巨大的损失。除此之外,很多人死于与吸烟有关的疾病。“不只是它吸烟,杀人”,史密斯博士说,“但这是事实,许多人死于火灾是由抽烟引起。“显然,吸烟是危险的。
据我所了解,我们的政府应该要求所有的香烟制造商进行写那支在每个包装上健康警示的香烟。烟草税也很重要。我们应该增强,健康意识的危险在吸烟。

Answer 3

As illustrated in the cartoon, the output of tobacco is about 14.2 billion pounds. The world has about 5.8 billion people, and 1.1 billion of those people are smokers. This also equals to twenty percent of the people around the world are smokers.Every year, we lose 200 billion dollars. What's more, over 30 million people die of smoking both directly and indirectly.
From the cartoon, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey the message: smoking is harmful to health, and the population of smokers is larger than the one that we imagine. All of us accept the fact that there are many smokers and that the market of tobacco is huge. Economically, smoking also causes huge losses. Also, many people die of smoking. “not only does smoking kill people through inhaling”, says Dr. Smith, ”but .” Obviously, smoking is dangerous.
To my best understanding, our government should require all the cigarette manufacturers to print a health warning on every package of cigarettes. Taxes on cigarettes can also help. And ourselves ought to enhance our health awareness of the danger on smoking. (? 最后一句是什么意思？)

Answer 4

Writing Directions:A. Study the following set of pictures carefully and write an essay in no less than200 B. Your essay must be written clearly on the ANSWER SHEET. C. Your essay should cover all the information provided and meet the requirements below: 1. Interpret the following pictures. 2. Predict the tendency of tobacco consumption and give your reason(reasons).

As is illustrated in the cartoon(picture), the output of tobacco is about 14.2 billion pound. The population is 5.8 billion in the world while smokers are, approximately, 1.1 billion (,)which means twenty percent people are smokers all over the world. and(And) every year, we lost(lose) 200 billion dollars. What’s more, over 30 million people die of smoking directly and indirectly.
From the cartoon, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey such a message: smoking is harmful to health, however, the population of smokers is larger than we (can)image. All of us accept the fact that the smokers are so many that the market of tobacco is so huge. Meanwhile, economically, smoking cause(causes) huge losses(loss). Besides, many people die of smoking. “no only is it smoking that kills people”, said Dr. Smith, ”but it is the fact that many people died from fire which is caused by smoking.” Obviously, smoking is dangerous.
To my best understanding, our government should require(order) all the cigarette manufacturers to write (down "Smoking is harmfuf for your health" in every package of cigarettes. A tax on cigarettes is also important. And ourselves ought to enhance our health awareness of the danger on smoking. 我认为错的都写在括号里