2014年9月4日雅思写作真题及范文

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   2014年9月4日雅思写作解析以及原创范文

   2014年9月4日雅思写作题目

  Now people in many countries can live and work anywhere they choose with improved communication technology and transport. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 很多国家的人可以工作生活在任何地方,因为有了交通和交流技术的便利,是否认为利大于弊?(2009年雅思写作旧题重现)

  题目解析:主题论证的是候鸟生活和异地工作的利弊,前题条件是交流交通技术的提高(网络和飞机)

  主题观点:候鸟生活以及异地工作的利大于弊。

  相关提问:

  1. Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think advantages of the development outweigh its disadvantages? 很多父母现在在异国他乡工作,会带上自己的家庭(联想老人和孩子);是否利大于弊?(2013年10月19日雅思考试写作题目)

   二段:利好的展开

  Granted, with the availability of new technology, people may get a reasonable career in any favorite cities without concerning about regional limits. No matter where one dwells in, he or she can keep contact with their family members via the Internet or airplane timely. Seen from positive aspects, a number of benefits can be acquired. The most glaring merit is that multiple career choice and constant change of residence means a broad range of working experience and constant refreshment. Meanwhile, one can become more versatile and well-informed by embarking on manifold jobs or living in different cities. Also, regular change of jobs makes one excel professionally and living in different cities greatly enriches one’s experience of the world. Hence, one can embrace brighter career and enjoy precious memory in the future. Last,to take up jobs in diverse cities enables one to enlarge his or her circle of friends so that one could establish well-connected interpersonal network. A better personal resource, to some extent, means more golden chances of job-promotion, comfortable salary and even the room for career achievement.(180)

   分析点评:

  写作利好时,以科技的便利引出才会紧扣主题。

  自由职业选择的利好是:

  第一:丰富的人生经验和持续的新鲜感,工作者会变得多才多艺和见闻广博。

  第二:一个人会在专业上成长,阅历上丰富。

  第三:一个人会结实更多的朋友,建立良好的人脉资源,人脉就机会,一个人可能会升职,加薪,拥抱更加辉煌的事业。

   详细解析:

  1. …… means a broad range of working experience and constant refreshment. ……意味着丰富的工作经历和持久的新鲜感

  2. One can become more versatile and well-informed 一个人可以变得多才多艺以及见闻广博

  3. makes one excel professionally 使人专业上更加精通

  4. enrich one’s experience of the world. 丰富一个人的人生阅历

  5. establish well-connected interpersonal network 建立良好的人脉资源

  2. An amount of people today change their career and place of residence several times during their lives. Is this positive or negative to development?很多人在一生中不断改变自己的居住地以及工作,是好还是不好?(2011年11月19日雅思写作题目)

  3. An increasing number people are changing careers during the working life what do you think the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? 很多人一生中不断地改变他们的职业,原因何在?你认为是消极的还是积极的? (2014年6月21日雅思写作题目)

   原创范文:

   首段:背景介绍+争议焦点+作家立场

  One of the traits of modern way of working is that people enjoy more freedom in selecting their dream jobs and places of residence. Thanks to the improvement of modern public transport and communication technology, many young adults are usually magnetized by splendid job opportunities and modernized lifestyle in new cities. People have been pondering for years the pros and cons of migrant lifestyle bought about by the high-tech without reaching any definite consensus. Personally, the merits of free job selection prevail over its possible downsides(86)

   点评:首段个性开篇,明确作家立场

  解析:

  1. One of the traits of modern way of working and lifestyle is that people enjoy more freedom in selecting their dream jobs and places of residence.现代工作方式的重要特征之一就是人们在选择他们心仪的事业和梦想的住地的时候更加自由。

  2. People have been pondering for years the pros and cons of migrant lifestyle bought about by the high-tech without reaching any definite consensus. 高科技的便利使人们可以像候鸟一样地生活,人们多年来在思考其利弊,未能达成共识。

  3. The merits of free job selection prevail over its possible downsides 自由工作选择的利大于弊

   三点:弊端的展开

  Nonetheless, some problems might ensue. Initially, the decomposition of family bonds is an inevitable risk due to the spatial separation. Imaginably, the face-to-face opportunities of communicating with family and friends will be diminished if people live too far. Besides, every individual should assume the obligation of getting married and startting his career, it is might be hard for people to obtain the sense of happiness and secure stable life if they change place of working too quickly. (77)

  点评:本段写作候鸟生活和异地工作的两个弊端

   第一:家庭纽带的分解,面对面交流的机会的减少

   第二:人人要成家立业,频繁地改变工作地,人很难获得幸福感和保证生活的稳定

  点评:(亮点词汇适合口语)

  1. Nonetheless, some problems might ensue. 然而,一些问题也许跟着发生

  2. the decomposition of family bonds 家庭纽带的分解

  3. assume the obligation of getting married and startting his career 担负成家立业的责任

   尾段:再次亮明观点

  Overall, my stand is that young people are supposed to expand their minds. That is the best approach for them to deepen their insight into what they are hoping to do with their lives. Landing jobs and exploring life in diverse cities exert many positive impacts on many people, especially for those who dare to challenge themselves. (57)

  点评:年轻人应该被鼓励去拓宽视野,这是最好方式让他们加深对于自我的洞察,在不同的城市择业和生活对于很多人有积极的影响,尤其是那些敢于挑战自己的人。

  解析:

  1. Overall, my stand is that …… 我的立场是 ……

  2. that is the best approach for sb to do sth 对于某人来说,这是最佳的方式去……

  3. landing jobs and exploring life in diverse cities 在不同的城市择业以及体验人生

   全文点评: 全文大约360字,论证饱满。本文个性开篇;句型引导争议焦点;清晰表达作家立场;逻辑词汇衔接清晰;论证具体,细节展开,尾段再次亮明观点。

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