Question

请英语高手帮我点评一下我的这篇英语四级作文，不甚感激。

1：各大学开设了各种各样的选修课
2：学生因为各种原因选择了不同的选修课
3：以你自己为例。。。。。。
What electives to choose?
Now different kinds of electives are opened to the college students in many university.They say the electives will expand the students' view and enrich their life.
Different students have different choice.Some students select a class of tai ji quan.They think that tai ji quan is our traditional cream and it have magic power to attract they to choose.In addition ,learning tai ji quan will make their health better.And other students like a class of environment in our life.They hold that environment in our world is getting more and more worse and we should learn something to protect it.Moreover,today many stores are around their school always use great many of plastic bags and boxes.
For my part,I like the culture of Chao shan,so I select a class of Chaoju.The teacher in our class is very interesting and humor.His class is relaxed.Importantly,I can learn something about the development of Chaoju and a skill of play.In sum,it is a good choice for me.

Answer 1

建议你注意用词和语法，比如单复数问题，你里面有很多语法错误，比如more and more worse,worse已是比较级，所以不要再用more,直接用worse and worse就可以了，注意你的连接词，比如最后一段， importantly，应用most importantly,in sum 应改为to sum up。总之，你最好多看些范文并背一些固定句型和转折词。另外你最好分三段或四段些，即introduction--body--conclusion.

Answer 2

Dear，建议你使用三段论来展开你的四级论文。

Answer 3

还行，表达的很清楚，就是简单句太多，略显水平低些，你可以尝试用几个复合句