Question

帮忙看看有没有什么语法错误

一篇自我介绍
Good afternoon everyone! My name is Eddy.I am fifteen years old this year.I have long black hair and black eyes.And I am wearing the glasses.
I am one hundred and fifty-five certimeters tall. I like smiling,so I am a outgoing girl. I love outdoors' activities a lot,like swimming and running.
请大家尽量“吹毛求疵”，帮我找出语法或逻辑错误，或者是有更好的句子可以代替原有的拙句。

Answer 1

修改后的文章：Good afternoon everyone! My name is Eddy，a fifteen-year-old girl with long black hair and black eyes. I am one hundred and fifty-five certimeters tall and wear glasses. I am an outgoing girl who likes smiling a lot. My hobbies are doing some outdoor activities, such as swimming and running.

Answer 2

建议不要总以I 开头 稍稍换换句型

Answer 3

I am fifteen years old this year.
要么就是I'll be fifteen years old this year要么就是I'm fifteen years old.
outdoors' activities改成outdoor activities.

Answer 4

an outgoing
最后一行like 去掉