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1 各大学开设了各种各样的选修课
2学生因为各种原因选择了不同的选修课
3以自己为例
What Electives to Choose
With the developing of the society,the students need to develop themselves in every aspect,In order to let the students fit into the world more quickly, every college has opened all kinds of electives for students.According to the survey,we know that 90% students are agreed with the college to opened the electives for them to choose.The students choose different electives because of all kinds of reasons.Some may choose exercise class because they like sports.In order to improve their handwriting,some may choose calligraphy class.Students may also choose dance class and so on.According to different students'interest,they can choose different electives.But on the other hand,sometimesyou may choose the elective which you don't like.Each elective ask for limited students so sometimes you might lose the chance.
Now,I'm a Grade 2 student at college,and I have choose my elective two times.Because there were so many people to choose the elective at the same time,I miss the elective which I interest in at that two times.But no matter what elective we choose, if we try our best to it ,wo can also learn a lot of knowledge.

Answer 1

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小细节什么的自己再检查一下，不知道你是不是在为四级准备作文，记住两点：
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Answer 2

选修课程的选择是什么
随着社会的发展，学生需要在各个方面发展自己，为了让学生走向世界适应得更快，每一个大学开设了students.According选修的各种调查，我们知道90 ％的学生与学院开设的选修课同意他们choose.The学生选择，因为各种不同的reasons.Some选修可以选择运动类，因为他们喜欢sports.In以提高他们的笔迹，有些人可能选择书法课。学生也可以选择舞蹈类等不同的学习兴趣on.According，他们可以选择，另一方面不同electives.But，sometimesyou可以选择选修您不like.Each选修有限所以有时候学生问你可能会失去这次机会。
现在，我是在大学二年级的学生，我有我的选修课选择两个times.Because有这么多的人选择在同一时间选修，选修我想念我的兴趣在这两个times.But不管我们选择什么选修，如果我们尽力了，窝也可以学到很多知识。

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