Question

帮忙纠正下语法错误。

topic today is "burn your soul".
Education at the beginning, we have the birth of a dream in the heart of the fire. Even today, the dream has begun to shift hours for the fiery action. In order to prevent the flame goes out the dream, we use as a fuel for the soul and life to a small fire into a raging fire.
Now, we have been away from the parents, but this only from the distance, we still rely on the ideological and material aspects of our parents. A successful entrepreneur once said, "if you mess up, it's not your parents' fault, so don't whine about our mistakes, learn from them.".
How to make the dream gradually transformed into reality? Work, confidence and opportunities, which are our essential, but apart from these, we also need? How to play to their maximum capacity most efficient? No one's life almost zero chance of an opportunity, how to seize this opportunity?
How do we honed in college themselves, allow themselves to be able to fully realize their potential and be able to seize the opportunities of people. Never complain about social injustice, and you can only change yourself, and then change the surrounding environment.Not to complain about his extraordinary ability to not only strive to upgrade themselves to change from their own, we can before the arrival of the opportunity to prepare.University life, we will learn to live independent, but this self is the one-sided, we can not separate himself entirely to live, so in college, we should set goals in terms of psychological and become mature. We want to make enough for their efforts to target. Then one step closer to achieving its final goal.

Answer 1

The topic today is "Burn Your Soul".
At the beginning of education, dream is born in the heart of fire. Even today, the dream has begun to shift hours for fiery action. In order to prevent the flame of dreams from dying, we use our souls and lives to nurture the small flame into a raging fire.
Now, we are away from our parents, but this is only a physical distance. We still rely on the ideologies and material impressions of our parents. A successful entrepreneur once said, "if you mess up, it's not your parents' fault, so don't whine about the mistakes, learn from them."
How do we transform dreams into reality? Work, confidence, and opportunities are essential, but apart from these, what else do we need? How do we work at our maximum capacity with the greatest efficiency? No one's life is void of opportunities. How do we seize the opportunities?
How do we hone the colleges themselves to allow the colleges to maximize the potential and opportunities of the people? Never complain about social injustices. Only after you change yourself can you make changes in your surrounding environment. Never complain about another person's extraordinary ability to be able to create changes in their own lives. All we can do is prepare ourselves for the arrival of opportunity.
Living a university life, we learn to become independent. But this is only independence in a physical sense. In college, we must prepare everyone to be psychologically mature. We need to make efforts to achieve our target and become one step closer to our final goal.

I am not really sure what some of your sentences mean, so I don't know if my corrections are the same as your original intentions.

Answer 2

没有什么大的错误

Answer 3

注意事项
Notes

1、商品图片中有款式编号和颜色，并且所有的头饰你都可以选择夹子类型，下订单的时候请备注，我们将根据你的要求邮寄，不备注则随机邮寄。
1. The products pictures including model number and color, and then all the headwear you can choose clip style, please note when place the order, we will airmail them according to you notes, if didn’t, it will be airmail random.

2、所有饰品都是手工制作，同款商品可能大小有细微差别，大多数夹子都会有丝带包边，以确保婴儿的佩戴更加安全。
2. All the products are made by hand; there will be a slight different in size among the same products, most of the clips will be edged by silk ribbon.

3、由于商品快速销售和更新，如果你下单的商品脱销，我们将邮寄给你类似款式，或者将最新的设计款式邮寄给你。
3. Due to rapid sells and updating, if the commodities which you placed are out of sell, we will airmail you a sample of similar products, or airmail the latest new style.

4、你的满意是我们的追求，如果你收到商品有任何问题，请第一时间联系我们，我们将和你一起解决，也一定会给你满意的答复。如果你对商品非常满意，请不要吝啬你的评价，我们也将持续改进，为你奉上更加优质的商品和服务。
4. Your satisfaction is what we always seeking for, if there is something wrong with the goods you received, please contact us immediately, we will solve it with you, and give you a satisfactory reply. If you are very happy with the products we sent to you, please always give your valuable information, we will keep improvement, and give you the more superior goods and service.

我们有很多饰品款式，请到商店里选择，非常感谢！
We have many styles, it will be much appreciate you if you choose from our store.

刚翻译的，希望对你有帮助！