Question

急求 高手和老师帮忙 英语改错共十处错误

I’m more than shocked that you're smoking in this photo .You didn't look cool at all with a cigarette in the mouth .As is known to all is that smoking does great harms to our lungs .Our heart and our brain as well .You will feel tiring out soon ,And you'll find hard to play football with your friends again .What's more ,once used with it ,it‘s very difficult to quit .I strongly sggest you should give it up until it's too late .Firstly ,try to quit it gradually so that you won't feel so badly .Secondly,be determined never mot to start smoking again .Thirdly,try to make yourself interesting on other things ,like sports.

Answer 1

one day a man finds a cocoon of a butterfly。 finds改为found,文章通篇为过去时态，所以这里要改成一般过去式。
2.a small opening appeared,through that it struggled to move its body， that改成which, 后面半句是从句，这里要用which来引导
but it made no progresses。 progress是不可数名称，所以progresses改成progress。
he took a pair of scissors and cut the remained cocoon opened。opened 改成open,这里要用形容词。比如cut the hair short
the butterfly then moved easily.and the butterfly could only crawl around with a weak body and small,soft wings 第一个and 改成but, 句意在这里是一个转折。
.in fact,which it was never able to fly. 去掉which
what the man didn`t understand that the struggle was required by the butterfly。这句是主语从句，但是没有谓语，that 前面加is
it had to get throough the tiny opening by themselves, themselves 改成itself,单复数不一致。
sometimes struggles are exact what we need in our life. exact 改成exactly 。还有一个找不到了。。。

希望能解决您的问题。

Answer 2

I’m more than shocked that you're smoking in this photo .You didn't look cool at all with a cigarette in the mouth .As is known to all is （is去掉）that smoking does great harms（变为harm） to our lungs .Our heart and our brain as well .You will feel tiring（改为tired） out soon ,And  you'll find （find后加it）hard to play football with your friends again .What's more ,once used with （改为to）it ,it‘s very difficult to quit .I strongly sggest you should give it up until（改为or） it's too late .Firstly ,try to quit it gradually so that you won't   feel so badly（改为bad） .Secondly,be determined never not（not去掉） to start smoking again .Thirdly,try to make yourself interesting（改为interested） on （改为in）other things ,like sports.

Answer 3

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I’m more than shocked that you're smoking in this photo. You didn't look cool at all with a cigarette in the mouth. (As改成What) is known to all is that smoking does great (harms改成harm) to our lungs, our heart and our brain as well. You will feel (tiring改成tired) out soon, And you'll find (加入it) hard to play football with your friends again. What's more, once used (with改成to) it, it‘s very difficult to quit. I strongly suggest you should give it up (until改成before) it's too late. Firstly, try to quit it gradually so that you won't feel so (badly改成bad). Secondly, be determined (去掉never或not) to start smoking again.Thirdly, try to make yourself (interesting改成interested) (on改成in) other things, like sports.

追问

老师 您好 我那个原文最一句有一个地方打错了 原文就是in 不是on 请问还好一处错误能帮我找下吗

追答

You didn't look cool 改成 You don't look cool
不过感觉 our lungs, our heart and our brain 那一块还有点问题，不知道有没有打错？