Question

you should learn more about our campus culture,thus you can communicate with other classmates be

you should learn more about our campus culture,thus you can communicate with other classmates better.帮我看看这个句子有没有错误？谢谢

Answer 1

没有，但可以优化下。
一般不建议用“should”这种命令式语气的词，可以换为 maybe you can learn......
另：thus 可以换为 and in this way
better 可以换为 more conveniently
哪个分高的你就看着用吧。。

Answer 2

没有问题呀。